Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 直接的な主張はあるが、流暢さと文法、語彙選択が改善の余地があります。曖昧な表現（uh, especially I like taking a photo of a beautiful sceneries）や複数形の誤用（a beautiful sceneries）を避け、語順を自然にして簡潔に述べましょう。具体性を持たせるためにどのような風景や動物が好きかを一つか二つ挙げ、接続語（for example, especially, such as）で文をつなぐと良いです。発音で詰まる「uh」を減らし、文を最大5文に収めてください。

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs, especially of natural landscapes and wildlife. For example, I often photograph mountains and coastal sunsets because of their dramatic colors. I also like capturing animals like deer or birds when they appear in their natural habitat.

제안: 回答が曖昧で一貫性に欠け、文法と語彙の誤りが目立ちます（taking picture→taking pictures、other areas→unclear）。話の主旨が都市部の人々を撮るのか田舎を撮るのか不明瞭なので、まずは明確にどちらを好むかを簡潔な主文で示してください。その後、理由を1〜2文で述べ、具体例や状況（cafes, streets, markets）を挙げて接続語（because, for example, I like）でつなぎます。発話のための間（uh）を減らし、流暢さを高めましょう。

예시: I prefer urban views because I enjoy photographing people and city life. For example, I like taking pictures in cafes and busy streets where everyday activities create interesting moments. The variety of scenes and the different facial expressions make city photography more engaging for me.

제안: 文法や語法の誤りが多く、意味が分かりにくい箇所があるため改善が必要です（another countries→other countries、I don't have seated→I haven't seen、how they live in there→how they live there）。まず簡潔に自分の好みを示し、その後で理由を明確に述べてください。具体的な期待（cultural differences, daily life）や例を加えると説得力が増します。接続語（because, so, for example）を使って構成を整え、最大5文に収めてください。

예시: I prefer photographing scenes in other countries because I want to learn about different cultures and daily life. For example, I enjoy capturing local markets and street scenes to see how people interact and what they sell. These photos help me reflect on cultural differences and broaden my perspective.

× I like taking pictures. Uh, especially I like taking a photo of a beautiful sceneries.

✓ I like taking pictures. Especially, I like taking photos of beautiful scenery.

The plural noun 'sceneries' is not commonly used; 'scenery' is an uncountable noun and should not take 'a' or plural - use 'photos of beautiful scenery' or 'a beautiful scene'. Also 'taking a photo of a beautiful sceneries' mixes singular 'a' with a plural noun. Improve by using correct countability: 'a beautiful scene' or 'beautiful scenery'.

× I like to see a beautiful nature and animals.

✓ I like to see beautiful nature and animals.

'Nature' is generally uncountable and does not take the indefinite article 'a'. Remove 'a' to match correct usage. Alternatively say 'a beautiful natural scene' if a singular countable idea is intended.

× I prefer taking picture of other areas.

✓ I prefer taking pictures of other areas.

'Picture' should be plural 'pictures' because the speaker refers to taking photos in general. Use plural form when speaking about activities or multiple items.

× That's because, umm, I enjoy seeing the, uh, people who live in, in urban areas and in, in cafes or supermarkets and, uh, it makes me feel, uh.

✓ That's because I enjoy seeing people who live in urban areas, for example in cafes or supermarkets, and it makes me feel interested.

The original sentence is disfluent and contains filler sounds and repetition. Clean up by removing fillers and reorganizing clauses: 'I enjoy seeing people who live in urban areas, for example in cafes or supermarkets' is clearer. Also finish the thought by stating the feeling (e.g. 'interested', 'curious').

× I like to take photos of another countries.

✓ I like to take photos of other countries.

'Another' is used with singular nouns; with plural nouns use 'other'. Change 'another countries' to 'other countries'.

× That's because I I don't have seated other countries people and how they live in there.

✓ That's because I haven't met people from other countries or seen how they live there.

'Have seated' is incorrect; the intended meaning is 'have met' or 'have seen'. Use present perfect 'haven't met' to express experience up to now. Also 'other countries people' is incorrect word order—use 'people from other countries'. Remove redundant 'in there' or keep 'there' after 'live'.

× That's why I think it makes me feel so reflection and like.

✓ That's why I think it makes me feel reflective and contemplative.

'Feel so reflection and like' is ungrammatical. Use adjectives ('reflective', 'contemplative') after 'feel' to describe emotions. Also avoid adding 'like' as a filler. Rephrase to a clear adjective describing the feeling.