Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap anlaşılır ancak düzeltilmesi gereken birkaç nokta var: doldurma kelimelerini (uh, um) azaltın, zaman ve kelime seçimine dikkat edin, ve cümleleri daha doğal ve akıcı hale getirmek için 1) net bir konu cümlesi kurun, 2) örneği açıklarken doğru zaman ve fiil kullanın, 3) gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın. Ayrıca maksimum 5 cümle kuralına uyun ve bağlaçlarla mantığı güçlendirin.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of nature. For example, I often photograph the sea and later post the best shots on my Instagram page. I like capturing different times of day, especially at sunrise when the light is soft.

제안: Cevap doğrudan ve kısa; ancak gramer ve akıcılık geliştirilebilir. ‘I would prefer in rural areas’ yerine doğru yapı ‘I prefer rural areas’ kullanılmalı. Ayrıca önceki cevaba atıf yaparken daha doğal bağlaçlar kullanın ve bir gerekçe ekleyin (neden tercih ettiğinizi belirtin).

예시: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy natural landscapes and quieter surroundings. For instance, I like photographing fields and forests where I can focus on details without background distractions.

제안: Cevap kısa ve anlaşılır fakat daha doğal ifade ve daha spesifik bir açıklama gerekli. ‘Inside’ kelimesi bu bağlamda uygun değil; ‘within them’ veya ‘to offer’ gibi ifadeler daha iyi olur. Ayrıca tercihinizi destekleyecek bir örnek veya karşılaştırma ekleyin.

예시: I prefer both because every country offers unique and beautiful places to photograph. For example, in my country I enjoy coastal scenes, while abroad I like exploring historic cityscapes and mountain ranges.

× Yes, I like mostly uh taking pictures in the nature.

✓ Yes, I mostly like taking pictures in nature.

'in the nature' is incorrect; 'nature' as a general concept does not need the definite article 'the' and 'mostly' should come before the verb phrase for natural word order. Suggestion: place 'mostly' before 'like' and use 'in nature'.

× For example, I take a picture in the sea after that, uh, I uh shoving on my Instagram page so this picture.

✓ For example, I take pictures at the seaside, and after that I post the picture on my Instagram page.

Problems: 'in the sea' is unnatural for taking photos of scenery; use 'at the seaside' or 'by the sea'. 'shoving' is incorrect word choice; should be 'posting'. The clause order and connectors were also incorrect; use 'and after that' to link actions. Suggestion: use correct preposition 'at' and the verb 'post'.

× I would prefer in rural areas.

✓ I would prefer rural areas.

When using 'prefer' with a noun phrase, do not include the preposition 'in'. Saying 'I would prefer rural areas' or 'I prefer living in rural areas' is correct. Suggestion: remove unnecessary 'in' or rephrase with a full clause.

× As I say on my previous answer, I like taking pictures in the nature.

✓ As I said in my previous answer, I like taking pictures in nature.

Errors: tense and preposition. Use past 'said' for a previous action. Use 'in my previous answer' not 'on'. Also 'in the nature' should be 'in nature'. Suggestion: use 'said' and correct prepositions and article usage.

× I prefer both because each country has beautiful places inside.

✓ I prefer both because each country has beautiful places.

The preposition 'inside' is unnecessary and unnatural here. Saying 'beautiful places' is sufficient. If you mean 'within it', you could say 'beautiful places within it' but it's redundant. Suggestion: remove 'inside' or rephrase as 'within them'.