Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a concise, natural response that directly answers the question with one clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Remove hesitations and repetitions, and keep the answer to no more than 3–4 sentences. Use linking words (e.g., because, so, and) to make your response coherent.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I find photography relaxing and creatively satisfying. For example, I like capturing city skylines at sunset and quiet countryside scenes in the morning, as the light often makes them look more dramatic. I usually take photos during my free time and share my favorites with friends.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give specific reasons using linking words (e.g., because, for example, and). Avoid vague phrases like “polished” without examples and eliminate filler words and repetition. Keep to 2–3 sentences maximum.

예시: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the architectural details and bustling atmosphere. For example, I like photographing modern buildings, interesting facades, and busy streets, which often provide striking contrasts and dynamic scenes.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific reasons or examples to support it. Remove hesitations and keep sentences smooth by using linking words like because, for example, and so. Mention concrete differences you notice when photographing abroad.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they offer new cultures, architecture, and landscapes that inspire my photography. For example, visiting a coastal town abroad might give me colorful markets and unique buildings to photograph, which helps me develop fresh ideas for my hobby.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I find it interesting and enjoyable.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I find them interesting and enjoyable.

The pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to 'pictures of different views' (plural). Use the plural pronoun 'them' for agreement. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents.

× Uh, photography is.

✓ Uh, photography is my passion.

'Photography is' is a sentence fragment lacking a complement. Completing the sentence with a noun or adjective (for example, 'my passion' or 'interesting') makes it grammatically complete. Suggestion: always provide a subject complement after 'is'.

× Photography is also my favorite hobby and something I like to do during my free time.

✓ Photography is also my favorite hobby and something I like to do in my free time.

'During my free time' is not wrong, but 'in my free time' is more natural English collocation. Suggestion: prefer common prepositional collocations (in my free time) for natural phrasing.

× I prefer views in urban areas because I like how the way it's polished and designed, the way it is constructed is is amazing and.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because I like the way they are polished and designed; the way they are constructed is amazing.

Multiple issues: redundant words ('how the way'), incorrect pronoun agreement ('it's' for plural 'views'), double 'is is', and an incomplete ending. Correct by removing redundancy, using plural pronouns ('they are'), fixing duplicated verb, and completing the sentence. Suggestion: simplify clauses and ensure subject-pronoun number agreement and no duplicate verbs.

× Nice and nice.

✓ They look nice.

'Nice and nice' is a nonstandard fragment lacking clear subject and verb. Rephrase into a complete clause such as 'They look nice' or 'They are nice.' Suggestion: use a verb to form a complete sentence.

× I prefer other countries because they give me a chance to explore, uh, different. Views and other details that inspire me to take more pictures and continue my hobby of photography.

✓ I prefer other countries because they give me a chance to explore different views and details that inspire me to take more pictures and continue my photography hobby.

Sentence had an unnecessary period splitting 'different. Views', creating a fragment. Also 'hobby of photography' is acceptable but 'photography hobby' or 'hobby of photography' either; corrected for fluidity. Suggestion: avoid random pauses that create sentence fragments and keep noun phrases intact.