Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct grammar (e.g., tense and plural forms) and avoid filler. For example, say why you enjoy photography and give a short, concrete detail about experience or influence.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. My father is a professional photographer, so I grew up watching him work and practiced a lot with his camera, which helped me learn composition and lighting.

제안: Answer directly and then support with specific reasons. Remove fillers like 'um' and finish your sentence. Use linking words (however, because, so) to structure your response and include one concrete example or description.

예시: I generally prefer views in rural areas because they offer more natural scenery and tranquility. For example, I enjoy photographing forests and rivers where the light and colors change throughout the day.

제안: Be precise and grammatical. Begin with a clear statement of preference, then give a specific reason and an example. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'other countries', 'attract people') and limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they often feature distinctive architecture and cultural landmarks. For instance, structures like the Eiffel Tower or ancient temples offer unique shapes and details that I find inspiring to photograph.

× Yes, I like because my father is a photographer, so when I was young I took picture a lot of time.

✓ Yes, I like it because my father is a photographer, so when I was young I took pictures a lot of the time.

Errors: missing object after 'like' ('like it'), plural form 'picture' should be 'pictures', and idiomatic phrase is 'a lot of the time'. Suggestions: Add the pronoun 'it' after 'like' to complete the verb, use plural 'pictures' for repeated actions, and use 'a lot of the time' for frequency.

× Umm, it depends on the case, but I generally prefer to rural areas because, uh, it has a lot of nature. So I love nature and.

✓ Umm, it depends on the case, but I generally prefer rural areas because they have a lot of natural scenery. So I love nature.

Errors: 'prefer to rural areas' is incorrect preposition and structure — say 'prefer rural areas' or 'prefer to go to rural areas'; 'it has' incorrectly refers to plural 'areas' so use 'they have'; 'a lot of nature' is acceptable but 'a lot of natural scenery' is more natural; sentence ended with 'and.' which is incomplete. Suggestions: Remove incorrect preposition 'to', match pronoun number (they), replace incomplete ending with a complete clause and avoid trailing conjunctions.

× Umm I prefer to another country because umm following country has a lot of beautiful architecture such as Eiffel Tower and so on.

✓ Umm, I prefer another country because the following country has a lot of beautiful architecture, such as the Eiffel Tower and so on.

Errors: 'prefer to another country' uses wrong preposition — say 'prefer another country' or 'prefer to go to another country'; 'following country' is unclear and needs 'the'; proper nouns like 'Eiffel Tower' normally take 'the'. Suggestions: Remove 'to' after 'prefer' or rephrase, add 'the' before 'following country' if you mean a specific country, and use 'the Eiffel Tower'.

× So I think that it has it makes possible for people to attract to every other any other country's people.

✓ So I think that it makes it possible for people to be attracted to people from other countries.

Errors: Redundant phrases 'it has it makes' and incorrect verb 'attract to' — use passive 'be attracted to' or 'attract people from'; 'every other any other country's people' is ungrammatical and redundant. Suggestions: Use a single clear structure ('it makes it possible'), use correct passive or active verb patterns ('be attracted to' or 'attract people from other countries'), and simplify 'other countries' people' to 'people from other countries'.