Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify unclear phrases, correct vocabulary and reduce redundancy. Start with a concise topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid odd or incorrect terms like "shun sheets" and use precise nouns and adjectives (e.g., "sunsets", "scenic spots").

예시: Yes, I love taking photographs of different views because they help me remember special moments. For example, I often capture sunsets and scenic spots in parks so I can relive peaceful evenings with friends.

제안: Good structure and clear preference. Improve by using a linking phrase for contrast and adding a brief, specific example to enrich the answer. Use a slightly wider range of vocabulary (e.g., "countryside vistas", "urban skyline").

예시: I prefer rural views because I'm a nature lover and enjoy photographing countryside vistas like rolling hills and dense woodlands. However, I also appreciate urban skyline shots, especially when a city’s modern architecture looks striking at dusk.

제안: Solid response with balance. Make the topic sentence more direct, and tighten wording to avoid repetition. Add a concrete example of a local place you like and mention a specific foreign landscape you'd like to see to show breadth of interest.

예시: I generally prefer views in my own country because it has many natural wonders and historic buildings, such as the coastal cliffs near my hometown. That said, I’d love to visit places like the Swiss Alps to experience dramatically different mountain scenery.

× For example, I often photograph shun sheets and Beauty of nature so I can look back on those peaceful evenings and enjoy the greenery with my friends.

✓ For example, I often photograph sunrises and the beauty of nature so I can look back on those peaceful evenings and enjoy the greenery with my friends.

The original sentence uses incorrect words and capitalization: 'shun sheets' is likely a misspelling of 'sunrises' (a noun) and 'Beauty of nature' incorrectly capitalizes common noun phrase and is awkward. Also 'the beauty of nature' requires the definite article 'the'. Suggestion: replace with 'sunrises' and 'the beauty of nature' to be natural and grammatically correct.

× I prefer the views in my own country because it is full of natural beauty and historic architecture, so I enjoy visiting those spots.

✓ I prefer the views in my own country because it is full of natural beauty and historic architecture, so I enjoy visiting those places.

The phrase 'those spots' is not ungrammatical but 'places' is more natural when referring to locations of interest. This is an article/word-choice improvement to fit register. No tense change necessary.

× Having said that, I would also love to explore scenery in other countries if I get opportunity in the future since different landscapes and cultures can be very inspiring.

✓ Having said that, I would also love to explore scenery in other countries if I get the opportunity in the future since different landscapes and cultures can be very inspiring.

The phrase 'get opportunity' is missing the article 'the'. This is a modal/possibility context where 'get the opportunity' is the correct collocation. Suggest adding 'the' to form natural English.