Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unfinished sentences and vague phrases. Focus on natural phrasing and correct verb forms.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography helps me remember moments and details I might otherwise forget. For example, I often photograph sunsets and city streets to capture color and atmosphere, and I later look at these photos to recall how the scene felt.

제안: Use correct grammar and linking words for contrast, and be more specific with adjectives and examples. Limit to 2–3 sentences: state preference and give one clear reason for each choice.

예시: I like both urban and rural views depending on my mood. Urban areas feel energetic and exciting because of the lights and activity, whereas rural areas are peaceful and relaxing, with open fields and quiet paths ideal for unwinding.

제안: Avoid overlong, unclear criticism; make a clear topic sentence and support it with one specific, concise reason. Use correct grammar and finish your thought. Offer a positive contrast rather than only negative comments about your country.

예시: I tend to prefer views in other countries because some places abroad appear better maintained and more varied in scenery. For example, I noticed cleaner parks and well-preserved historical districts in my travels, which made sightseeing more enjoyable.

× I like taking picture of different scene because taking picture is a tool to memorize the thing that your eyes see with a technology.

✓ I like taking pictures of different scenes because taking pictures is a way to remember the things your eyes see using technology.

Multiple nouns refer to general, countable items (pictures, scenes, things) so plural forms are required. Use 'pictures' and 'scenes' for plural, 'a way to remember' is more natural than 'a tool to memorize', and 'using technology' is a clearer prepositional phrase. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× For example, I also use it to.

✓ For example, I also use it to remember moments or share them with others.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb and object, causing a sentence fragment. Provide a complete verb phrase such as 'use it to remember moments' to finish the idea and make the sentence grammatically correct. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Personally I prefer both of them depend on how I feel at that time.

✓ Personally, I prefer both depending on how I feel at the time.

Pronoun 'them' is unnecessary after 'both'; the verb phrase should be 'depending on' (gerund) to modify 'prefer'. Also include a comma after 'Personally' and use 'at the time' for natural phrasing. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× If it is urban area it's kind of give the vibe more eccentric, more enthusiasm.

✓ If it is an urban area, it kind of gives a more eccentric, more energetic vibe.

Subject-verb agreement requires 'gives' for third person singular 'it'. Add the article 'an' before 'urban area'. 'More enthusiastic' should modify people; use 'more energetic' to describe a vibe. Include commas for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 2

× But rural area is very crucial when you need a relaxed or calmer feeling.

✓ But a rural area is better when you need a relaxed or calmer feeling.

'Crucial' is incorrect in this context; use 'better' or 'more suitable'. Add the article 'a' before 'rural area'. 'Relaxed' and 'calmer' are both adjectives describing the feeling; the structure 'a relaxed or calmer feeling' is acceptable. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× I will say I prefer views from other countries more because I think sometimes Thailand didn't manage like the government didn't manage to maintain the environment pretty well as other country.

✓ I would say I prefer views from other countries more because sometimes Thailand's government does not manage the environment as well as other countries do.

Use conditional 'would say' for a polite preference. Use possessive 'Thailand's government' and present tense 'does not manage' to indicate ongoing issues. Use comparative structure 'as well as' and plural 'other countries' for correct comparison and plurality. Include 'do' at the end for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× So there are lots of garbage and.

✓ So there is a lot of garbage and litter.

The original is an incomplete sentence and mixes countability. Use 'there is a lot of garbage' (uncountable) or 'there is a lot of litter' and complete the thought. 'Lots of garbage and' is a fragment; finish with a noun. Grammar problem type ID: 26