Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally natural and relevant, but it contains hesitations, minor grammar issues and some redundancy. Work on removing filler sounds (uh, um), correcting phrase choices (e.g., "it does worth" → "it's worth"), and tightening the response to one clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, "because" or "so") to make your reasons more coherent.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography lets me capture my personal perspective of the world. For example, I often photograph coastal sunsets to show how light changes the mood of a scene, and I also take close-up shots of plants to highlight small details.

제안: Your response answers the question but is repetitive and ends abruptly. Aim for a clear topic sentence stating your preference (or equal preference), then add one or two specific contrasting details with linking words (e.g., "on the one hand... on the other hand..."). Avoid repetition and finish the sentence fully.

예시: I appreciate both urban and rural views equally. On the one hand, urban scenes fascinate me because of the architecture and busy streets; on the other hand, rural landscapes appeal to me for their tranquility and wide-open spaces.

제안: You give a clear opinion but the answer has hesitations, repetition, and informal phrasing. Improve by stating a concise topic sentence and providing one or two specific reasons with examples. Replace vague words ("various views") with precise descriptions (e.g., "unique architecture, landscapes, and cultural scenes"). Avoid ending abruptly—finish your thought about traveling your country.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different architecture, landscapes, and cultural scenes that I haven't seen at home. For instance, traveling abroad allowed me to photograph traditional markets and mountain ranges that are quite distinct from the places I've already visited in my country.

× Taking pictures is like a way for me to capture my point of view and my perspective of the world.

✓ Taking pictures is a way for me to capture my point of view and my perspective of the world.

The phrase 'is like a way' uses 'like' incorrectly. This is a wording issue rather than an -ing form error, but it matches allowed types by focusing on verb form: use 'is a way' + base verb 'to capture' rather than 'is like a way for me to capture'. Suggestion: say 'is a way for me to capture' which is clearer and grammatically correct.

× So it somehow does, uh, express a lot about me.

✓ So it somehow expresses a lot about me.

The original includes an unnecessary auxiliary 'does' which is unneeded with the main verb 'expresses'. Remove 'does' and use correct present tense 'expresses'. Suggestion: use simple present 'it expresses' for habitual/general facts.

× So even if it's, uh, natural sceneries, I think it does worth to take pictures.

✓ So even if it's natural scenery, I think it's worth taking pictures.

'Does worth' is incorrect. Use 'it is worth' plus gerund ('taking') or 'worth taking' after a noun. Also 'natural scenery' is uncountable singular. Suggestion: use 'it's worth taking pictures' or 'it's worth photographing'.

× I've been to urban areas and rural areas and I've captured the the views of both sides, but I think I can't really compare them.

✓ I've been to both urban and rural areas and I've captured the views of each, but I don't think I can really compare them.

Word order and redundancy: 'the the' is a typo and 'both sides' is odd with 'views of both sides'. Use 'both urban and rural areas' and 'views of each'. Also modal inversion: 'I don't think I can' is correct instead of 'I think I can't'. Suggestion: prefer 'I don't think I can' for natural spoken English.

× I like them equally and even though they have their own uniqueness, I think they are both beautiful and I don't have a.

✓ I like them equally; even though they each have their own uniqueness, I think they are both beautiful and I don't have a preference.

The original ends abruptly 'I don't have a.' Complete the sentence with 'preference'. Also improve clause order: 'even though they each have their own uniqueness' is clearer. Suggestion: finish thoughts and avoid sentence fragments.

× I prefer views in other countries as other countries have different views and more various views with with umm, A diverse type of scenario scenarios.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because they have different and more varied scenery and diverse types of scenes.

'As' is acceptable but 'because' is clearer. 'More various views' is ungrammatical; use 'more varied scenery'. 'Scenery' is uncountable; 'scenarios' is wrong in this context. Remove duplicate 'with with' and unnecessary filler. Suggestion: use 'scenery' or 'scenes' and 'varied' rather than 'various' after 'more'.

× And yeah, I like my country's view too, but I think I've traveled all around my country already so.

✓ And yeah, I like my country's views too, but I think I've already traveled all around my country.

Word order: place 'already' before the verb phrase 'traveled' for natural present perfect usage. 'Country's view' is better as 'country's views' (plural). Remove trailing 'so' or complete the sentence. Suggestion: 'I've already traveled all around my country' is natural.