Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Улучшите ясность и грамматику: начните с чёткого топик‑предложения, укажите какой именно тип видов вы любите и добавьте краткое обоснование. Избегайте словесных запинок и повторов. Постройте ответ из 2–3 предложений, используя связку (because, so, and) и правильные времена (present simple или present perfect для опыта).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I have been photographing landscapes for four years, and I especially like capturing city skylines and coastal scenes because they change a lot with the light.

제안: Сведите к минимуму запинки и сделайте ответ прямым: начните с чёткой позиции (I prefer...) и добавьте одно‑два обоснования с использованием связок (because, as, so). Дайте конкретный пример того, что вам нравится в сельской местности (например, природа, тишина, детали).

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because I enjoy natural landscapes and peaceful settings. For example, I often photograph fields and forests where the light and textures are more varied than in the city.

제안: Исправьте ошибки в словоупотреблении и местоимениях: вместо «use» и «her» используйте «them» или «my country». Дайте краткое объяснение, почему вы предпочитаете виды в своей стране и приведите конкретный пример места. Формулируйте 2 предложения, первое — позиция, второе — причина с деталями.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I know the landscapes well and feel connected to them. For instance, I love photographing the coastal cliffs near my hometown because their colours and formations are unique.

× So I really enjoy taking photoaking on it for four years.

✓ So I have really enjoyed taking photos for four years.

The original contains a non-word 'photoaking' and incorrect tense. Use the noun 'photos' with the present perfect 'have enjoyed' to express an action that started in the past and continues to the present. Suggestion: use 'I have enjoyed taking photos for four years.'

× And yes, I like taking pictures for different views.

✓ And yes, I like taking pictures of different views.

Preposition 'for' is incorrect with 'views'; use 'of' to indicate what the pictures depict. Also 'pictures' plural is correct. Suggestion: use 'taking pictures of different views.'

× So I enjoy taking photos of different views, but most of all I like, uh, I prefer views, uh, in uh, uh, rural, uh, areas.

✓ I enjoy taking photos of different views, but most of all I prefer views in rural areas.

The original is redundant ('I like, I prefer') and contains filler words. Remove redundancy and fillers. 'Prefer' already expresses liking more than alternatives. Word order: 'prefer views in rural areas' is natural. Suggestion: speak concisely: 'I prefer views in rural areas.'

× I prefer use in my country because I like, I love her and she is beautiful, fantastic and very large.

✓ I prefer views in my country because I love it; it is beautiful and very large.

Multiple issues: 'prefer use' is incorrect—probably meant 'prefer views'. Using 'her' and 'she' for a country is informal and inconsistent; use the neutral pronoun 'it' for a country. Combine 'I like, I love' into 'I love' for clarity. 'Fantastic' is acceptable but redundant with 'beautiful'; choose one. Suggestion: 'I prefer views in my country because I love it; it is beautiful and very large.'