Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は意図が伝わりますが、文法と語順の誤り、冗長な表現、語彙の繰り返しが目立ちます。改善点：1) 主題文を明確にして（例: "I don't take photos often."）、2) 繋ぎ言葉を使って理由を整理する（"because", "so"など）、3) 不要な繰り返しを避ける、4) 文法（時制や前置詞）を訂正する。具体には「take a picture so often」→「take photos often」「at lunch with my friend」や「for 5 minutes or more」の表現を自然に直す練習をしてください。

예시: I don't take photos very often because it takes time to set them up. For example, when I'm eating with friends, someone usually spends five minutes taking pictures, so I prefer to start eating right away rather than waiting.

제안: 答えは意見を伝えていますが、語順や名詞・冠詞の使い方（単数・複数）、不明瞭なフレーズ（"Of course it's this"）が問題です。改善点：1) まず明確なトピック文を使う（"I prefer rural areas."）、2) 理由を論理的に展開するために接続詞を使う（"because", "for example"）、3) 名詞の単複と冠詞を正しく使う練習をする（"rural areas", "the urban areas"など）、4) 具体的な描写や例を一つ加えて説得力を高める。

예시: I prefer rural areas because they are quieter and less crowded. For example, in the countryside you can enjoy quiet walking trails and wide open fields, which I find more relaxing than busy city streets.

제안: 意図は伝わりますが、多くの文法と語彙の誤り（"I pay for look look"など）、不自然な表現、冗長性があります。改善点：1) 直接的な主題文（"I prefer views in other countries."）で始める、2) 理由を明確にし簡潔に述べる（"because..."）、3) "already know"や"new sightseeing"の自然な表現（"familiar with the sights"、"see completely new places"）に置き換える、4) 接続語で構成を整える。

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I'm already familiar with the sights in Japan and I want to see places that are completely new to me. For instance, visiting a foreign city lets me discover different architecture and landscapes I haven't seen before.

× Actually I don't take a picture so often because it takes some time some time to take a picture.

✓ Actually I don't take pictures very often because it takes time to take a picture.

The student misplaces frequency expression and uses singular 'a picture' where plural is appropriate for habitual actions. Use 'take pictures' for general habit and 'very often' as correct adverb placement. Also remove duplicate 'some time some time' and simplify to 'takes time'. Suggestion: say 'I don't take pictures very often because it takes time.'

× For example, when I eat something with at lunch with my friend, my friend always take the picture for 5 minutes or more.

✓ For example, when I eat something at lunch with my friend, my friend always takes pictures for five minutes or more.

Several issues: incorrect preposition 'with at lunch' should be 'at lunch'; plural/singular and article issues: 'take' must agree with singular subject 'my friend' so use 'takes'; 'the picture' is better as 'pictures' in general; use 'for five minutes or more' for duration and spell out numbers in formal speech. Suggestion: 'When I eat at lunch with my friend, my friend always takes pictures for five minutes or more.'

× But actually I would like to eat at first more than taking a picture it.

✓ But actually I would rather eat first than take a picture.

The original has incorrect word order and an extraneous pronoun 'it'. Use 'would rather' to express preference, 'eat first' for sequence, and parallel verbs 'eat... than take...'. Suggestion: 'I would rather eat first than take a picture.'

× I prefer to look at rural area more than about areas.

✓ I prefer looking at rural areas more than urban areas.

Wrong preposition 'about' and singular 'rural area' vs plural needed for general preference. Use 'looking at' or 'to look at', and compare 'rural areas' with 'urban areas'. Suggestion: 'I prefer looking at rural areas more than urban areas.'

× The reason why is the urban area is too busy for me.

✓ The reason is that urban areas are too busy for me.

Unnecessary 'why' and incorrect article/number agreement: use 'that' to introduce clause and plural 'urban areas are' to express general statement. Suggestion: 'The reason is that urban areas are too busy for me.'

× Of course it's this.

✓ Of course it is this scene.

'It's this' is vague; clarify the noun 'scene' to indicate what 'this' refers to. Use 'it is' expanded if needed. Suggestion: 'Of course it is this scene.'

× This scene is picturesque, but I think the more rural areas has a lot of the beautiful sights.

✓ This scene is picturesque, but I think rural areas have many beautiful sights.

Mix of errors: 'the more rural areas has' is incorrect—use plural subject 'rural areas have'. 'a lot of the beautiful sights' is awkward; use 'many beautiful sights' for generalization and remove unnecessary 'the'. Suggestion: '...rural areas have many beautiful sights.'

× I pay for look look at other countries to my own countries, because the countries which I live in Japan is too busy and also I already know about the building.

✓ I prefer looking at other countries to my own country, because the country where I live, Japan, is too busy and I already know the buildings.

Multiple errors: 'pay for look' should be 'prefer looking' to express preference (present tense habit). Use singular 'country' for 'my own country'. Use 'where I live' instead of 'which I live in'. 'Japan is too busy' needs punctuation; 'the buildings' is better than 'about the building'. Suggestion: 'I prefer looking at other countries to my own country because the country where I live, Japan, is too busy and I already know the buildings.'

× However, if I go to the another countries, we can see the total new sightseeing.

✓ However, if I go to other countries, I can see completely new sights.

Incorrect article 'the another countries' should be 'other countries'. 'We can see' changes subject incorrectly; keep 'I' consistent. 'Total new sightseeing' is unnatural — use 'completely new sights' or 'brand-new attractions'. Suggestion: 'If I go to other countries, I can see completely new sights.'