Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give 1–2 specific supporting details. Avoid unrelated or confusing phrases (e.g., “he is Napoleon”) and grammatical errors. Use linking words like “for example” or “especially” correctly, and keep answers to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, I often photograph parks and mountain scenery, and I like taking photos of city streets at night because the lights create interesting effects. I find it relaxing and it helps me remember places I’ve visited.

제안: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Begin with a clear preference sentence, then give specific reasons and an example. Fix basic grammar (subject–verb agreement) and use linking words such as “because” or “for example.” Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences.

예시: I prefer urban views because cities offer a wide variety of scenes, from historic streets to modern architecture. For example, my city also has nearby mountains and lakes, so I can photograph both natural and urban landscapes in one outing.

제안: Give a clear, structured response. State your preference (or say ‘both’) in one sentence, then support it with specific reasons and a short example. Reduce hesitations (“uh”, repeated words) and correct grammar (use singular/plural and articles). Use linking words like “however” or “also” to contrast choices.

예시: I prefer both my own country and other countries. At home I know the best spots and can capture familiar scenes, but when I travel abroad I enjoy discovering new landscapes and cultures; for instance, I love photographing traditional markets when I visit other countries.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, for example in parks, in mountains and in streets on the night, because it's very lovely for me and I prefer take a photo because he is Napoleon.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, for example in parks, in the mountains and on the streets at night, because it is very pleasant for me and I prefer to take photos because they remind me of Napoleon.

Multiple issues: incorrect use of articles and prepositions (should be 'the mountains', 'on the streets', 'at night') and incorrect pronoun and verb forms. 'It' refers to the activity, not 'it's very lovely for me'—use 'pleasant for me'. 'Prefer take' is missing 'to' (infinitive), and 'a photo' with 'he is Napoleon' makes no sense; likely intended plural 'photos' and 'they remind me of Napoleon' (pronoun agreement). Suggestion: use correct articles and prepositions, use 'prefer to' + base verb, and ensure pronouns agree with their antecedents.

× Thank you for questions. I prefer views in urban areas because in the city, city have a lot of views and my city have mountains, lakes.

✓ Thank you for the question. I prefer views in urban areas because in the city there are a lot of sights and my city has mountains and lakes.

Errors: missing article ('the question'), subject-verb agreement ('city have' should be 'the city has' or use 'there are a lot of sights'). 'A lot of views' is awkward—'sights' is more natural. Use 'my city has' for possession. Suggestion: use singular verb with singular subject ('city has') and 'there are' for plural existence.

× It's beautiful place and I love taking photo in here.

✓ It's a beautiful place and I love taking photos here.

Missing article 'a' before 'beautiful place'. 'Taking photo' should be plural 'taking photos' or 'taking a photo'. 'In here' is unidiomatic; use 'here'. Suggestion: include articles where needed and use natural adverb placement ('here').

× I thank you for question. I prefer both, uh, because in my, my, my own country have a lot of beautiful place, uh, in this place, I can take photo and in other countries have a lot of beautiful places.

✓ Thank you for the question. I prefer both because my own country has many beautiful places where I can take photos, and other countries also have many beautiful places.

Problems: 'I thank you for question' should be 'Thank you for the question'. Subject-verb agreement: 'my own country have' should be 'has'. Quantifier and count noun errors: 'a lot of beautiful place' should be 'many beautiful places'. 'In this place, I can take photo' is awkward—use 'where I can take photos'. Suggestion: simplify repetition, use correct verb form 'has', and match plural nouns with plural quantifiers.