Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more natural and slightly longer (but under 5 sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words like “uh,” correct minor grammar (e.g., plural/singular and articles), and add one specific detail to enrich the response. Use a linking phrase if you add a reason or example.

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking pictures of different views when I go outside because I like capturing changing light and interesting scenes. For example, I often photograph city streets at sunset or quiet parks in the morning to catch the best colors.

제안: Give a direct preference (or say you like both) with a clear topic sentence, remove fillers, correct grammar and word choice, and provide specific reasons or examples using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'however'). Keep it concise and coherent.

예시: I prefer rural views because they tend to be more peaceful and full of natural scenes, such as rolling fields and wildlife. However, I also appreciate urban views when I want to photograph architecture and busy street life.

제안: Begin without unnecessary greetings, state your preference clearly, and improve word choice and grammar (e.g., 'natural beauty' instead of 'good nature'). Add one or two specific, vivid details and a linking phrase to explain why you prefer it. Keep within five sentences.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because of its natural beauty and variety of landscapes. For example, many places are full of wildflowers, and in the mornings you can hear birds singing, which makes the scenery very peaceful and memorable.

× Yes I do, and I mostly take picture, uh, when I go outside.

✓ Yes, I do, and I mostly take pictures when I go outside.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because 'mostly' and the activity of taking photos implies multiple instances. Use 'pictures' for countable plural nouns. Also add a comma after 'Yes' and remove filler 'uh' for clarity.

× I can choose because some area, uh, in rural are very beautiful and very beautiful creature.

✓ I can choose because some areas in rural places are very beautiful and have a lot of beautiful creatures.

'Area' should be plural 'areas' to agree with 'some'. 'Rural' needs a noun like 'places'. 'Creature' should be plural 'creatures' when referring to many. Reworded to 'have a lot of' to convey existence of creatures.

× There are a lot of lot of good things and in urban or rural areas.

✓ There are a lot of good things in both urban and rural areas.

The original repeats 'a lot of' and has awkward word order. 'Both urban and rural areas' clearly expresses inclusion of both. Removed repetition and fixed sentence structure.

× Hello, I prefer my own country, because my country is very good nature and very good.

✓ I prefer my own country because it has very good natural scenery.

'Good nature' is not idiomatic; 'natural scenery' or 'nature' works. 'Hello' is unnecessary. Simplified sentence and kept present tense 'prefer' to match question.

× It has very good view, it's full of flowers, many kinds of flowers, and in the morning the birds sing a song.

✓ It has very good views; it's full of flowers of many kinds, and in the morning the birds sing.

'View' should be plural 'views' to match general statement. 'Many kinds of flowers' reordered to 'flowers of many kinds' or 'many kinds of flowers' is acceptable; combined into one sentence with proper punctuation. 'Sing a song' is redundant; 'the birds sing' is natural.