Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and reduce fillers (e.g., "Umm"). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details or an example and finish. Vary vocabulary slightly and avoid awkward phrasing like "cannot well do". Keep it within 3–4 sentences for clarity.

예시: Yes, I do. I see photography as an accessible form of art that lets people express themselves quickly. For example, when I visit a park I experiment with light and angles to capture moods without needing long training. This makes it an enjoyable way to be creative.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence stating your position, then provide specific contrasting details using linking words (e.g., "whereas", "for example"). Remove filler words and vague lists like "etcetera". Limit to 2–3 concise sentences and include a brief reason why you appreciate each.

예시: I don't have a preference because both offer unique qualities. Urban areas have striking architecture and vibrant street scenes, whereas rural areas offer peaceful landscapes and abundant greenery that are great for relaxed photography.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and then give one vivid, specific example as you did. Avoid hyperbolic single-word statements like "Immaculate" without context; instead, describe why the mood felt that way. Keep to 2–3 sentences and link ideas with a brief causal phrase (e.g., "because", "for example").

예시: I prefer views in other countries, because traveling exposes me to different styles and atmospheres. For example, in Italy I loved how the historic architecture combined with warm, late-afternoon light to create a romantic, timeless mood that felt almost cinematic.

× Absolutely yes. Taking pictures is a form of art in my opinion, as photography is a way one can express themselves.

✓ Absolutely yes. Taking pictures is a form of art in my opinion, as photography is a way one can express oneself.

The reflexive pronoun should agree with the indefinite singular subject 'one'. 'Themselves' is a plural reflexive pronoun; the correct singular form is 'oneself'. Use 'oneself' when referring back to 'one'.

× Umm instead of drawing, which many people cannot well do without years of practice, photography is easier to pick up and thus way easier to experiment and take pictures.

✓ Umm instead of drawing, which many people cannot do well without years of practice, photography is easier to pick up and thus much easier to experiment with and to take pictures.

The adverb 'well' should follow the verb phrase 'do' ('do well'). 'Way' as an informal intensifier is acceptable in speech but 'much' is more standard. Also, 'experiment' requires the preposition 'with' when followed by the object, and parallel infinitives should include 'to' for clarity ('to experiment with and to take pictures').

× I would say urban areas and rural areas are vastly different, whether it's in terms of umm infrastructure, the views, the scenery, the greenery, etcetera.

✓ I would say urban areas and rural areas are vastly different, whether they are in terms of, um, infrastructure, the views, the scenery, the greenery, etcetera.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to the plural subject 'urban areas and rural areas'. Use the plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'are' for agreement. Also add commas for clarity and keep filler 'um' separated.

× I think every country has their own kind of beauty, but I do prefer views in other countries, especially Italy.

✓ I think every country has its own kind of beauty, but I do prefer views in other countries, especially Italy.

When referring back to the singular 'every country', use the singular possessive pronoun 'its' rather than the plural 'their'. 'Every' takes a singular noun and singular pronoun.

× The mood was Immaculate.

✓ The mood was immaculate.

Capitalization of 'Immaculate' is unnecessary in the middle of a sentence; use lowercase 'immaculate'. This is a style/capitalization issue rather than a grammar category in the provided list; using lowercase conforms to standard English capitalization rules.