Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (tense and word forms), avoid redundancy, and use one or two supporting details with a linking word. For example, say why you take photos and give a specific detail about how you use them.

예시: Yes, I love taking photos of landscapes. I take pictures to remember special trips, and later I often look at them to relive the scenery and share highlights with friends.

제안: Provide a clear direct answer first, fix grammar and vocabulary (e.g. "provincial" and "born and bred"), and use linking words to add one or two concrete reasons or examples. Keep it concise and natural.

예시: I prefer rural views because I was born and raised in the countryside. For example, I enjoy the fresh air, open fields and warm sunlight, which feel more peaceful than the busy city.

제안: Answer directly and avoid repeating phrases. Correct grammar (countable nouns, tense), and give a specific example or reason with a linking word. Mention a particular place or island to be more specific.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because the Philippines has many beautiful islands. For example, places like Palawan and Siargao offer stunning beaches and unique landscapes that feel unforgettable.

× As a person who liked the idea of outside journey, it's very important for me to take a landscape picture for a memory so that I can still recap those outside breathtaking views that I seen on my journey on outside.

✓ As a person who likes the idea of traveling outdoors, it's very important for me to take landscape pictures as memories so that I can still recall the breathtaking outdoor views that I saw on my journeys.

Multiple adjective/adverb and word-choice errors: 'liked' should be present 'likes' to match general preference (also subject-verb agreement but treated here as adjective/adverb/context), 'outside journey' is unnatural — use 'traveling outdoors' or 'outdoor journeys', 'a landscape picture for a memory' is awkward — use plural 'landscape pictures as memories', 'recap' is informal and not idiomatic for recalling scenes — use 'recall', 'outside breathtaking views' should be 'breathtaking outdoor views', 'that I seen' uses incorrect verb form — should be past 'saw', and 'on my journey on outside' is redundant. Suggestion: simplify and use natural adjective forms and correct verb forms, match singular/plural nouns, and place adjectives before nouns (e.g., 'breathtaking outdoor views').

× Well as a girl of a provincial I would say I prepare as a rural views because I born in bred in countryside.

✓ Well, as a girl from a province, I would say I prefer rural views because I was born and raised in the countryside.

Subject-verb and word-choice errors: 'a girl of a provincial' is incorrect — use 'a girl from a province' or 'from a rural area'; 'I prepare as a rural views' is ungrammatical and has subject-verb agreement and noun number issues — likely intended 'I prefer rural views'; 'I born in bred in countryside' uses wrong verb forms and missing articles — use past passive 'I was born and raised in the countryside'. Suggestion: use correct verbs for past events ('was born', 'was raised/raised') and use correct verbs for preferences ('prefer') and correct noun phrases ('the countryside').

× I would say I can see breathtaking sunshine, fresh air and also I like the idea of lighting.

✓ I would say I can enjoy the breathtaking sunshine and fresh air, and I also like the way the light looks.

Awkward adjective/adverb and word-choice: 'breathtaking sunshine' and 'fresh air' are fine but 'I can see' is better as 'I can enjoy' in this context; 'the idea of lighting' is unnatural — likely intended to comment on the quality of light or lighting, so use 'the way the light looks' or 'the lighting'. Suggestion: choose natural collocations (enjoy sunshine, appreciate the light) and use parallel structure when listing items.

× I would say I really like the idea of views in my country.

✓ I would say I really like the views in my country.

Redundant phrasing: 'the idea of views' is awkward; use simple present 'I really like the views in my country' to express general preference. Suggestion: prefer concise present-tense statements for habits or preferences.

× I would say Philippines has a lots of island that you can take on and also it's memorable.

✓ I would say the Philippines has a lot of islands that you can visit, and they are memorable.

Quantifier and article errors: 'a lots of island' is incorrect — use 'a lot of islands' or 'lots of islands'; missing definite article 'the Philippines'; 'that you can take on' is wrong verb collocation for visiting islands — use 'visit'; 'it's memorable' should agree in number with 'islands' so 'they are memorable'. Suggestion: use correct quantifiers ('a lot of', 'lots of') and match number between subject and verb/pronoun.

× You can say that it's the scenery was pretty and also you can see different kind of island here in the Philippines.

✓ You could say that the scenery is beautiful, and you can see many different kinds of islands here in the Philippines.

Adjective and noun-number errors: 'it's the scenery was pretty' mixes tenses and pronouns — correct to 'the scenery is beautiful' for general statement; 'different kind of island' needs pluralization and articles — use 'many different kinds of islands'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent for general truths (present simple), use proper plural forms ('kinds of islands'), and avoid combining 'it is' with a past clause.