Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, fix grammar (remove extra articles, correct verb forms), and add one specific example. Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid redundancy.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I love nature. For example, I often photograph coastal sunsets and mountain landscapes near my hometown, which I find peaceful and photogenic.

제안: Improve grammar and clarity: give a direct topic sentence, correct subject-verb agreement, remove repetition, and add one reason with a linking word. Keep it to 2 sentences.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because the scenery is cleaner and more tranquil. For instance, rural fields and forests offer fresh air and fewer buildings, so I find them more relaxing than city streets.

제안: Clarify tense and structure: answer directly, correct tense and word choice, and give a concise reason and a specific example of the place you want to visit. Avoid awkward phrases like "stun those views."

예시: At the moment I prefer views in my own country because they are familiar and accessible. However, I hope to visit New Zealand in the future because its dramatic fjords and clear lakes look incredibly beautiful and different from what I usually see.

× Yes, I mostly like the collecting the pictures of the different views because I love nature very much and the environment in my country is very beautiful.

✓ Yes, I mostly like collecting pictures of different views because I love nature very much and the environment in my country is very beautiful.

The sentence has unnecessary definite articles 'the' before 'collecting', 'pictures', and 'different views'. Use no article before a gerund phrase 'collecting pictures' and no article before plural 'pictures' or 'different views' when speaking generally. Also remove the extra 'the' before 'collecting'. Suggestion: say 'collecting pictures of different views'.

× I mostly prefer the views in the rural areas because the environment in the rural areas are much better in rather than in urban ones.

✓ I mostly prefer the views in rural areas because the environment in rural areas is much better than in urban ones.

There is a subject-verb agreement error: 'the environment... are' should be singular 'is' because 'environment' is an uncountable singular noun. Also the phrasing 'much better in rather than in urban ones' is incorrect. Use the comparative pattern 'better than' not 'better in rather than in'. Remove unnecessary definite articles: 'in rural areas' is more natural than 'in the rural areas'. Suggestion: 'the environment in rural areas is much better than in urban ones.'

× For this time I enjoy the views in my country, but as I have a plan to go abroad and I had seen that New Zealand have much better environment, so I wish to go abroad to stun those views which are seem to be very beautiful.

✓ At the moment I enjoy the views in my country, but I plan to go abroad and I have seen that New Zealand has a much better environment, so I wish to go abroad to see those views that seem very beautiful.

Multiple tense and form problems: 'For this time' is unnatural; use 'At the moment' or 'Right now'. 'I have a plan to go abroad' is better as 'I plan to go abroad'. 'I had seen' mixes past perfect incorrectly; use present perfect 'I have seen' to indicate recent experience. Subject-verb agreement: 'New Zealand have' should be 'New Zealand has' (country is singular). 'Much better environment' needs an article or 'a' before 'much better environment' or use 'a much better environment'. 'To stun those views which are seem to be' is incorrect: 'stun' is wrong verb; use 'see' and 'which are seem to be' is ungrammatical—use 'that seem very beautiful'. Suggestions: simplify and correct tense/agreements as shown.