Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler phrases (e.g. “if I talk about myself”, “at that time”), and use linking words when listing examples. Also correct word order and count nouns (e.g. “a lot of pictures” not “different a lot”). Aim for 2–4 sentences with varied vocabulary (e.g. landscapes, wildlife, scenery).

예시: I enjoy taking photos of different views. I especially like landscapes and wildlife, so when I travel I often photograph mountains, birds and interesting roads. Because I try to capture atmosphere, I sometimes wait for good light or clouds to improve the shot.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, avoid hesitations (“well”, “uh”), and be specific about reasons and examples. Use linking words (for example, so, therefore) and correct plural forms and collocations (e.g. “the countryside”, “different kinds of buildings”). Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer views in the countryside because they are peaceful and less crowded. For example, I enjoy photographing traditional houses, rolling hills and small roads. This calm atmosphere helps me focus and get better photographs.

제안: Respond directly and use correct tense and grammar (e.g. “I visited Manali last time”). Avoid repetition of “personally” and vague phrases. Be specific about what you like and use linking words to order ideas (for example, “for instance”, “also”). Keep sentences concise and varied in vocabulary.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because it has many beautiful regions to explore. For instance, when I visited Manali last year I photographed several valleys and mountain ranges. I enjoyed capturing different mountain scenes and the local landscapes because they felt familiar and inspiring.

× Whenever I go in different locations at that time I click different a lot of pictures like mountains, like birds, animals, roads, clouds.

✓ Whenever I go to different locations, I take a lot of pictures of mountains, birds, animals, roads, and clouds.

The verb 'click' is a literal translation; native usage is 'take pictures' (verb + object). Also word order and unnecessary phrases like 'at that time' should be removed. Use 'go to' (preposition correction) and list items with commas. Suggestion: use 'take' for photographing and simplify the sentence structure.

× Whenever I go in different locations at that time I click different a lot of pictures like mountains, like birds, animals, roads, clouds.

✓ Whenever I go to different locations, I take a lot of pictures of mountains, birds, animals, roads, and clouds.

Use 'go to' not 'go in' for visiting locations. 'Of' is the correct preposition after 'pictures' to indicate what the pictures show. Remove 'at that time' as it is redundant. Suggestion: say 'go to different locations' and 'take pictures of ...'.

× And whenever I go, I always take a lot of pictures of different kind of buildings, houses, landscape.

✓ And whenever I go, I always take a lot of pictures of different kinds of buildings, houses, and landscapes.

'Different kind' should be plural 'different kinds' when referring to multiple types. 'Landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' to match 'pictures of'. Also add 'and' before the last item in a list. Suggestion: use plural forms when listing multiple items or types.

× Well, personally I really like to enjoy my country because there are lot of places where a person can go well.

✓ Well, personally I really enjoy my country because there are a lot of places a person can visit.

Replace 'like to enjoy' with 'enjoy' for natural verb use. Add the article 'a' before 'lot'. 'Where a person can go well' is awkward; use 'a person can visit'. Suggestion: use concise verb forms and correct articles.

× Last time I visit Manali at there I visit different kind of valleys.

✓ Last time I visited Manali, I visited different kinds of valleys.

The event happened in the past, so use past tense 'visited' not present 'visit'. Also use 'kinds' plural and remove 'at there'. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense for past events and correct word order.

× Last time I visit Manali at there I visit different kind of valleys.

✓ Last time I visited Manali, I visited different kinds of valleys.

'At there' is incorrect; simply 'in Manali' or no preposition needed when saying 'visited Manali'. Use correct prepositions or omit them. Suggestion: say 'visited Manali'.

× Personally I like to visit long valley at that I take a lot of pictures of different mountains and I really enjoy the experience.

✓ Personally, I like to visit long valleys where I take a lot of pictures of different mountains, and I really enjoy the experience.

'Valley' should be plural 'valleys' if referring generally; if referring to one specific 'long valley' rephrase to 'a long valley'. 'At that' is incorrect; use 'where' to link clauses. Suggestion: use correct number (singular/plural) and relative pronouns like 'where'.