Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Говорите короче и прямее, избегая повторов. Начните с темы, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных деталей. Уберите тавтологии (например, «making memories by photos» и «remember the memories» говорят одно и то же). Попрактикуйтесь в использовании связок (for example, because, so) и замените общие фразы конкретными деталями (какие виды вы фотографируете, какие моменты запоминаете).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me remember special moments. For example, on trips I often photograph sunsets and street scenes, then later I look at these pictures to recall the atmosphere and places I visited.

제안: Исправьте грамматические ошибки и говорите более связно: используйте простые конструкции без лишних слов. Объясняйте причину конкретнее и добавьте пример. Например, вместо «I am a city girl» скажите «I prefer urban views because…» и опишите, что именно привлекает в городских сценах. Уделяйте внимание правильной форме глаголов и словосочетаний (prefer, taking photos of).

예시: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the energy of the city and its cafes and shops. For example, I like photographing busy streets and people hurrying to work because those scenes feel lively and full of detail.

제안: Сформулируйте ответ яснее и избегайте противоречивых и неуместных деталей (например, упоминание «summer camp» не связано с вопросом). Дайте чёткую позицию (prefer my country or other countries) и приведите 1–2 конкретные причины. Следите за повторениями и структурой предложения. Также исправьте стилистические ошибки («better to be honest» звучит разговорно).

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy different cultures, climates and architecture. For instance, when I travel abroad I like photographing colorful markets and historic buildings, which feel quite different from places in Uzbekistan.

× I really enjoy taking photos of different views, particularly because I really like making memories by photos.

✓ I really enjoy taking photos of different views, particularly because I really like making memories with photos.

The phrase 'making memories by photos' is unnatural. Use the preposition 'with' after 'making memories' to indicate the means. Also 'taking photos' is correct. Suggestion: 'making memories with photos' is idiomatic and clear.

× For example, when the trip is over, I really love to rewatch the photos that I took on a trip and remember the memories.

✓ For example, when the trip is over, I really love to rewatch the photos that I took on the trip and remember the memories.

Use 'on the trip' rather than 'on a trip' because the speaker just referred to 'the trip' in the same sentence; maintain definite reference. The past tense 'took' is correct. Also 'rewatch' is acceptable; ensure article consistency.

× I think that I'm prefer views that are in urban areas because I am a city girl that likes shopping and restaurants.

✓ I think that I prefer views in urban areas because I am a city girl who likes shopping and restaurants.

'I'm prefer' is incorrect because 'prefer' is not used with contraction 'I'm'. Remove contraction and use simple present 'I prefer'. Use 'who' for people instead of 'that'. Also 'views in urban areas' is more natural than 'views that are in urban areas'.

× So I would definitely like to taking photo of people having fast-paced day.

✓ So I would definitely like to take photos of people having a fast-paced day.

After 'would like' use the base verb 'to take' (infinitive), not the -ing form. Use plural 'photos' and include the article 'a' before 'fast-paced day'. Also 'having a fast-paced day' correctly describes people's activity.

× I cannot say that that I hate the views in summer camp.

✓ I cannot say that I hate the views at summer camp.

Double 'that that' is an error; remove the extra 'that'. Also use the preposition 'at' with 'summer camp' rather than nothing. The sentence structure improves to 'I cannot say that I hate the views at summer camp.'

× However, in other countries the views are better to be honest, and I really love people there and the weather, which in Uzbekistan is not good nowadays.

✓ However, to be honest, the views in other countries are better, and I really love the people and the weather there; in Uzbekistan the weather is not good nowadays.

'To be honest' is the natural adverbial phrase. 'The views are better to be honest' is awkward. Move 'to be honest' before the clause. Use 'the people and the weather there' for clarity and split long sentence for fluency. 'Which in Uzbekistan is not good nowadays' is a misplaced clause; rewrite as separate clause.

× So in Uzbekistan views are good, but in other countries.

✓ So views in Uzbekistan can be nice, but I prefer the views in other countries.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkward ('but in other countries' lacks a verb). Provide a complete contrast clause: 'but I prefer the views in other countries.' This completes the sentence and clarifies meaning.