Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is positive and enthusiastic, but it is slightly repetitive and contains some awkward phrasing (e.g. “the views which I found” and “I would just picturise them”). To improve, give a clear topic sentence, then add one specific example and a brief reason using linking words. Keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences) and use more natural verbs like “capture” or “photograph.”

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography helps me capture memorable moments. For example, last summer I photographed a dramatic sunset at the coast, which had vivid colors and interesting clouds. I often share these photos with friends to show how beautiful the scene was.

제안: Good comparison, but the wording is informal and contains an incorrect phrase (“forced me to”). Make your topic sentence direct, then support it with a specific reason and a linking word. Avoid sentence fragments; complete your sentences and use descriptive vocabulary (e.g. “rolling fields,” “tranquil”).

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because the rolling fields and greenery are very peaceful. For instance, when I visit the countryside I enjoy wide open landscapes and fresh air, which feel more relaxing than busy city scenes.

제안: Your answer is clear and honest, but contains minor errors (e.g. “a other country”) and could be slightly expanded with a brief reason and linking phrase. Start with a direct statement, add a reason, and finish with a conditional sentence about future travel. Use contractions selectively and correct article usage.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I have explored many places and feel familiar with their landscapes. However, if I have the opportunity to travel abroad, I would certainly explore new scenery to experience different cultures and natural features.

× I like taking pictures of different views, especially the views which I found quite exciting or mesmerising.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views, especially the views that I find quite exciting or mesmerising.

The original uses found (past) with I like (present), causing a tense and adjective clause mismatch. Use present simple 'find' to match the habitual liking. Also replace 'which' with 'that' for defining clause clarity though 'which' is acceptable; using 'that' is more natural here.

× I would love to take the pictures of those views and the views I would love to explain to others.

✓ I would love to take pictures of those views and explain them to others.

The original repeats 'the views' and uses an awkward structure 'the views I would love to explain to others.' Delete the extra article 'the' before 'pictures' and combine verbs to avoid repetition: 'take pictures of those views and explain them to others.' This fixes redundancy and improves sentence flow.

× I would just picturise them.

✓ I would just picture them.

Phrasing 'picturise' is nonstandard; the correct verb in this context is 'picture' (to form a mental image). 'Picturise' is rare or incorrect in standard English.

× I prefer views in both the areas, but if I have to mention I prefer views in rural areas because the lush greenery of the fields forced me to.

✓ I prefer views in both areas, but if I have to choose, I prefer views in rural areas because the lush greenery of the fields captivates me.

Remove the unnecessary definite article before 'areas' ('both the areas' -> 'both areas'). 'If I have to mention' is awkward; use 'if I have to choose.' 'Forced me to' is incorrect for attraction; use 'captivates me' or 'I can't take my eyes off them.' Also adjust verb tense/choice: 'captivates' matches present preference.

× Can't take my eyes off it.

✓ I can't take my eyes off it.

Sentence lacks subject 'I'; in spoken English fragments occur, but in formal answers include subject and contraction: 'I can't take my eyes off it.' Also 'it' could refer to 'the scenery' (singular) or 'them' for plural; ensure pronoun agrees with noun. If referring to 'views,' use 'them'.

× To be very honest, I prefer views in my own country because I have explored many places and I feel more familiar with them.

✓ To be honest, I prefer the views in my own country because I have explored many places there and feel more familiar with them.

Use 'To be honest' (more natural than 'To be very honest'). Add definite article 'the' before 'views' to specify, and add 'there' after 'places' to clarify location. Also omitting the second 'I' before 'feel' makes the sentence smoother.

× But if I get a chance to visit a other country then I'll definitely visit and explore them.

✓ But if I get a chance to visit another country, I'll definitely go and explore it.

Errors: 'a other' should be 'another' (single word). 'Visit and explore them' mixes singular 'country' with plural 'them'; use singular pronoun 'it' and avoid repeating 'visit' by using 'go and explore it.' Also add a comma before 'then' or remove 'then' for better flow.