Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid hesitations and grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verbs and articles (e.g., "taking pictures", "I have fewer opportunities", "there aren’t enough natural views").

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. However, recently I have had fewer opportunities because I live in a congested area of Dhaka where there aren’t many natural views, so I rarely get a chance to photograph nature.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and add a specific reason with a linking word. Fix repetitions and grammar (e.g., "I grew up in my village" "open fields"). Keep it to two or three sentences.

예시: I prefer countryside views because I grew up in a village and love open fields. For example, there were many trees beside the fields where I used to play, which makes rural scenery more relaxing to me.

제안: Start with a direct answer, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and improve vocabulary and grammar (e.g., "my own country, Bangladesh", "lots of trees", "fresh air helps me relax").

예시: I prefer views in my own country, Bangladesh, because it has abundant natural scenery. For instance, village areas have lots of trees and fresh air, which help me relax and clear my mind.

× Yes, I like taking picture of different views.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views.

The noun 'picture' should be plural because 'different views' implies multiple photographs. Use plural 'pictures' to match the plural idea and maintain noun-number agreement.

× I have less opportunity to taking picture because uh, uh, now I am living in a congested place in Dhaka and there are not uh, sufficient amount of natural view.

✓ I have fewer opportunities to take pictures because now I am living in a congested area of Dhaka and there is not a sufficient amount of natural scenery.

Multiple issues: 'have less opportunity' should use 'fewer opportunities' for countable 'opportunities' (singular/plural and quantifier). After 'opportunity to' use the base verb 'take' rather than 'taking'. 'picture' needs plural 'pictures'. 'congested place' is better 'congested area'. 'there are not ... amount' is incorrect: 'amount' with uncountable nouns takes 'is not a sufficient amount' or better 'not enough' and 'natural view' should be 'natural scenery'. Corrections chosen follow the allowed problem types: singular/plural, verb + -ing, and preposition/article adjustments to make the sentence grammatically correct.

× So uh, I couldn't take picture of uh, the nature.

✓ So I couldn't take pictures of nature.

'couldn't take picture' needs plural 'pictures' and 'the nature' is unnatural; use 'nature' without 'the'. 'Couldn't' is past modal correct, but noun form and article needed fixing.

× I prefer the countryside view because as I am as I grew up in my village and I love to play open field, so I have seen many trees there beside the field.

✓ I prefer the countryside because I grew up in my village and I used to play in the open fields, so I saw many trees beside the fields.

Tense and structure: mixing present 'I am' with 'I grew up' is inconsistent. Use past 'I grew up' for upbringing. 'I love to play open field' should be 'I used to play in the open fields' to express habitual past action. 'have seen' can be simplified to past 'saw' to match context. Plurals: 'field' -> 'fields'. Also omit redundant 'as'.

× I prefer views in my own country that is Bangladesh and Bangladesh is a very natural country and in the village side there is mass trees and fresh air that helps me to keep my mind fresh and I take deep fresh air.

✓ I prefer views in my own country, Bangladesh. Bangladesh is a very natural country, and in the villages there are many trees and fresh air that help me keep my mind fresh and breathe deeply.

Several article and noun-number issues: use a comma to appositively state 'Bangladesh'. 'In the village side' is incorrect; use 'in the villages' or 'in the countryside'. 'mass trees' is incorrect; use 'many trees'. 'there is' with plural 'trees' must be 'there are'. 'helps me to keep' should be 'help me keep' because plural subject 'trees and fresh air' require plural verb, and natural English omits 'to' after 'help'. 'I take deep fresh air' is unidiomatic; use 'breathe deeply'.