Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid hesitations and filler words (e.g., "you know"). Correct basic grammar (plural/singular, verb forms) and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., "compose" or "frame" instead of "add different photos"). Aim for 2–4 sentences.

예시: Not really. I rarely take photos because I struggle to find good angles and compose shots properly. For example, when I try to frame a landscape I often miss the right foreground or horizon, so the picture looks unbalanced.

제안: Answer directly and fix vocabulary errors ("reviews" -> "rural areas", "densely public city" -> "very crowded city"). Use one linking phrase to add a specific reason and a brief example. Keep sentences short and clear and avoid fillers.

예시: I prefer rural areas. I grew up in crowded Hong Kong, so I appreciate the peace and fresh air in the countryside; for example, I enjoy walking among green hills where I can relax and breathe easily.

제안: Give a clear statement first, then support it with a specific, well-structured example. Remove hesitations and use correct noun phrases ("night views" -> "night view" or "night skyline"). Use linking words like "because" and "for example." Fix grammar ("light showed" -> "lights show" or "there is a light show"). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I love Hong Kong's night skyline. For example, Victoria Harbour has a nightly light show where the buildings are illuminated, and the view from a plane on approach is especially spectacular.

× That's a tricky question that I had never thought about.

✓ That's a tricky question that I have never thought about.

The original uses 'had never thought' (past perfect), which implies a reference to a past time before another past event; here present perfect 'have never thought' is correct because the speaker means up to now they have not considered it. Use present perfect to link past experience to the present.

× I'm not quite sure how I can, you know, find a good angle and then to take a good pictures.

✓ I'm not quite sure how I can, you know, find a good angle and then take good pictures.

Remove the infinitival 'to' before 'take' because 'can' is a modal that should be followed by the base verb 'take'. Also change 'a good pictures' to 'good pictures' to fix number agreement and article misuse; plural 'pictures' does not take 'a'.

× Also, I find it quite difficult to frame and add different photos to make them look good.

✓ Also, I find it quite difficult to frame and combine different photos to make them look good.

The verb 'add' is not the best collocation here; 'combine' or 'edit' better expresses putting multiple photos together. This is a word choice/quantifier-style issue affecting clarity. No tense change needed.

× Given the bills, it is too troublesome for me.

✓ Because of the cost, it is too troublesome for me.

'Given the bills' is an unnatural phrasing here. Use 'because of the cost' or 'given the expense' to express that paying bills makes the activity troublesome. This corrects sentence structure and word choice for clarity.

× If you ask me, I would prefer reviews because as I mentioned, I grew up in a very densely public city, Hong Kong, so we seldom have chance to, you know, enjoy the rural scenery which has a lot of greeneries or can take a deep breath with the fresh air.

✓ If you ask me, I would prefer rural views because, as I mentioned, I grew up in a very densely populated city, Hong Kong, so we seldom had a chance to, you know, enjoy the rural scenery with lots of greenery or to take a deep breath of fresh air.

Multiple issues: 'reviews' should be 'rural views' (word choice). 'Densely public' is incorrect; use 'densely populated'. 'We seldom have chance' needs article and tense: 'we seldom had a chance' or 'we seldom have a chance' depending on meaning; here past experience -> 'seldom had a chance'. 'Greeneries' is uncountable: use 'greenery' or 'lots of greenery'. 'Can take a deep breath with the fresh air' -> 'to take a deep breath of fresh air' corrects infinitive form and idiomatic preposition.

× So yeah, I do enjoy the world areas more.

✓ So yeah, I do enjoy rural areas more.

'World areas' is incorrect and unclear. The intended contrast is 'rural areas'. Correcting the noun fixes pronoun/reference/word choice error.

× Well, I think many people may say they would prefer viewers in the other countries, but for me, I would, you know, choose to enjoy the views in my own country.

✓ Well, I think many people may say they would prefer views in other countries, but for me, I would, you know, choose to enjoy the views in my own country.

'Viewers' is the wrong word; 'views' is correct. Remove 'the' before 'other countries' for natural expression. This fixes incorrect noun use and article usage.

× I know that many people may find it boring to look at their views in their, uh, home country, but I think Hong Kong actually has a very nice night views.

✓ I know that many people may find it boring to look at the views in their home country, but I think Hong Kong actually has very nice night views.

'Their views in their home country' is wordy; 'the views in their home country' is clearer. 'A very nice night views' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' and use 'very nice night views'.

× Every night will have light showed in the Victoria Harbor.

✓ Every night the lights are shown in Victoria Harbor.

The original 'Every night will have light showed' is ungrammatical. Use a present simple or present progressive: 'Every night the lights are shown in Victoria Harbor' or 'Every night, lights are displayed in Victoria Harbor.' Use passive with correct past participle 'shown' or active 'lights are displayed.'

× That is fascinating and if you have a chance to, you know, take a flight from other places to Hong Kong where you look from the sky.

✓ That is fascinating, and if you have a chance to, you know, take a flight from elsewhere to Hong Kong, you can see it from the sky.

'From other places to Hong Kong' is wordy; 'from elsewhere to Hong Kong' is smoother. 'Where you look from the sky' is ungrammatical; use 'you can see it from the sky.' This corrects preposition and clause structure issues.