Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar (plural/singular, tense), and add one specific detail with a linking word. Keep to 2–4 sentences. For example, correct "take picture" to "take pictures" and replace redundant phrases like "I like it very much" with a reason. Use linking words such as "because" or "for example".

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially rural landscapes because I grew up in a village. For example, I often photograph rivers and fields when I travel, as they remind me of home.

제안: Answer directly with a clear preference and use linking words to give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler phrases (e.g. "at least said earlier", "uh") and ensure grammatical accuracy ("take pictures of"). Limit to 2–4 sentences and connect memories to your preference with "because" or "so".

예시: I prefer rural views because I grew up in a village and have many fond memories there. For example, a river ran beside my house where I used to swim, so I often photograph rivers, canals and forests.

제안: Give a direct answer and a concise reason using correct grammar and fewer hesitations. Use linking words like "because" or "so" and avoid repetition. Be specific about what you like and how travel opportunities will help you, keeping to 2–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I love its rural scenery and culture. For instance, by joining the civil service I hope to travel to different regions and photograph villages, rivers and traditional landscapes.

× Yes, I like to take picture of different views, especially the rural areas.

✓ Yes, I like to take pictures of different views, especially rural areas.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because 'take pictures of different views' refers to multiple instances. Use plural with 'different' and general plural contexts. Suggestion: use 'pictures' whenever referring to more than one photo.

× I was born and grown up in a village, so I have a fascination for landscape.

✓ I was born and brought up in a village, so I have a fascination with the landscape.

The phrase 'born and grown up' is unnatural; the correct collocation is 'born and brought up' or 'born and raised'. Also 'fascination for' can be 'fascination with' and 'landscape' should be preceded by an article 'the' when referring to landscapes in general in this context. Suggestion: use common collocations like 'born and brought up' and 'fascination with the landscape'.

× Anywhere I go, I take the pictures as the pictures of trees, rivers.

✓ Anywhere I go, I take pictures of trees and rivers.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'pictures' and the phrase 'as the pictures of' is incorrect. Use 'take pictures of' plus plural nouns. Suggestion: drop unnecessary articles and use correct verb + noun structure: 'take pictures of trees and rivers'.

× At least said earlier, I was born in a village and I have a lot of memories.

✓ As I said earlier, I was born in a village and I have a lot of memories.

'At least said earlier' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'As I said earlier'. This is a sentence structure and word choice issue related to introductory phrases. Suggestion: use standard discourse markers like 'As I said earlier'.

× In my village there is a river beside my house.

✓ In my village there is a river beside my house.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; 'beside' correctly indicates location next to the house. No change needed. Explanation: preposition 'beside' is appropriate to express proximity.

× I used to swim there.

✓ I used to swim there.

This sentence correctly uses the past habitual 'used to' to describe past repeated action. No change needed. Explanation: 'used to' is appropriate for past habits.

× So I like to take the picture of rural areas, rivers, canals, forests, etcetera when I uh.

✓ So I like to take pictures of rural areas, rivers, canals, and forests, etc., when I...

Use plural 'pictures' because multiple photos are implied. Also include commas correctly and use 'and' before the last item. The trailing 'uh' indicates hesitation; keep ellipsis or finish sentence. Suggestion: 'take pictures of rural areas, rivers, canals, and forests'.

× I like the view of my country very much and one of the reason for joining in the civil service is that I will get, I would get enough opportunity to travel different parts of my country and, and I I like the rural part very much.

✓ I like the scenery of my country very much, and one of the reasons for joining the civil service is that I will get enough opportunity to travel to different parts of my country, and I like the rural areas very much.

Multiple issues: 'one of the reason' should be 'one of the reasons' (quantifier agreement). 'Joining in the civil service' should be 'joining the civil service' (incorrect preposition). 'I will get, I would get' is redundant; choose one auxiliary—'I will get' for future. 'Travel different parts' requires preposition 'to'. 'Rural part' should be plural 'rural areas' or 'the rural part' depending on meaning. Suggestions: use plural for 'reasons', drop unnecessary preposition 'in', use 'travel to', and keep consistent tense/modal choice.