Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitations and repetitions, correct basic grammar and word choice, and organize the answer with a clear topic sentence plus 1–2 specific supporting details. For example, avoid filler sounds (“uh”, “umm”) and repeated words; use correct plurals and vocabulary (e.g., “children” not “Childs”). Keep it to 2–3 sentences: state you like photography and give 1–2 examples of subjects and why.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy photography. I often take pictures of urban scenes, natural landscapes and children at play because each subject offers different emotions and compositions that challenge my creativity.

제안: Be more fluent and use precise vocabulary. Start with a clear statement of preference (or neutrality), then give specific reasons using linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example,” “on the other hand”). Replace vague words like “beautiness” with “beauty” or “charm.” Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid filler words.

예시: I don’t have a strong preference because both are rewarding. Urban areas offer dynamic architecture and interesting street scenes, while rural areas provide peaceful landscapes and natural light, so I enjoy photographing both for different perspectives.

제안: Make the comparison clearer and correct grammar: use comparative structures correctly (“not as important as”) and avoid sentence fragments. Give a concise opinion first, then a specific supporting reason or example. Use linking words such as “because” or “so”.

예시: I think the location matters less than your photography skills because good technique lets you capture interesting shots anywhere. For example, mastering composition and lighting helps me turn an ordinary street or hill into a compelling photograph.

× Photography is one of my main interests and I I like to take pictures from urban areas, rural areas, nature, Childs and sometimes good uh subjects, umm such as events.

✓ Photography is one of my main interests and I like to take pictures in urban areas, rural areas, nature, children and sometimes good subjects such as events.

Errors: repeated word 'I I', incorrect preposition 'from' (should be 'in' for locations), incorrect plural 'Childs' (should be 'children'), and unnecessary filler words. Suggestion: Remove duplicate 'I', use 'in' for photographing locations, use correct plural 'children', and omit filler 'uh/umm' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:1

× I like photography either in urban areas, uh, or, uh, rural areas because, uh, each of them has their own, umm, beautiness and, uh, allow me to, uh, choose different, uh, perspectives.

✓ I like photography either in urban areas or in rural areas because each of them has its own beauty and allows me to choose different perspectives.

Errors: informal fillers removed; 'beautiness' is incorrect — use 'beauty'; agreement errors: 'their' with singular 'each' should be 'its'; verb agreement 'allow' should be 'allows' to agree with singular subject; preposition consistency 'in' added. Suggestion: Use 'each' with singular pronoun and singular verb, and use correct noun 'beauty'. Grammar problem type ID:13,27

× In my opinion, the views are not so important than the photography skills.

✓ In my opinion, views are not as important as photography skills.

Errors: incorrect comparative structure — use 'not as ... as' rather than 'not so ... than'; unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'views' when speaking generally. Suggestion: Use 'not as important as' for comparisons and omit 'the' when referring to views in general. Grammar problem type ID:26,22

× When you gain your skills, you can get pictures from every views and you can. See the landscapes more.

✓ When you gain skills, you can take pictures of any view and you can better capture landscapes.

Errors: 'your skills' is acceptable but 'gain skills' is more natural; 'get pictures from every views' has plural mismatch and wrong preposition — use 'take pictures of any view'; sentence fragment 'you can. See the landscapes more' should be combined and rephrased; 'see the landscapes more' is awkward — use 'better capture landscapes' or 'see landscapes more clearly'. Suggestion: Use 'take pictures of any view' and a clear verb phrase like 'better capture landscapes.' Grammar problem type ID:1,11,26