Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法的な誤りや繰り返しがあり、流暢さと正確さを改善する必要があります。具体的には、主語と時制を明確にし、繰り返しを避け、1文目で直接質問に答えた後に短い理由を付け加えてください。また、語彙を少し増やして「save the memories」をより自然な表現（例えば“preserve memories”や“keep memories”）にすると良いです。練習方法としては、同じ内容を5回異なる言い方で言う練習や、旅行についての短いまとまったスピーチを作って音読することを勧めます。

예시: Yes, I do. When I travel I often take photos to preserve my memories, because pictures help me remember special moments and places.

제안: 回答は明確ですが文の構造が単純で語法や語順のミスが見られます。特に“go mountains”は不自然で“go to the mountains”が正しいです。繋ぎの語（for example, because, so）を適切に使い、同じ形容詞（beautiful）を繰り返さないように別の表現（scenic, picturesque, peaceful）を使うと良いです。改善のために1文で趣旨を述べ、続く文で具体例を1つ挙げ、最後に感情や理由を付け加える練習をしてください。

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because the scenery is more peaceful and scenic. For example, I often go to the mountains and take photos of the forests and rivers, which I find very calming.

제안: 内容は伝えようとしていますが、文法と語彙の誤りが多く理解しづらい点があります。“Japanese country”は不自然で“Japan”や“my country, Japan”が正しいです。固有名詞（例：shrines, temples）は複数形や綴りに注意し、“UMM”は正しい名称か確認してください。“grateful”や“brave”は景色の形容に不適切なので、“serene, historic, beautiful”など適切な形容詞に置き換えてください。改善法としては、簡潔に理由を述べ（I prefer views in Japan because...）、具体例（shrines and temples）を自然な表現で説明し、不要なフィラー（uh）を減らす練習をしてください。

예시: I prefer views in my own country, Japan, because many places like shrines and temples have beautiful, historic architecture. For example, I enjoy visiting traditional shrines where the gardens and buildings create a peaceful atmosphere.

× Yes I like I especially especially if I went when I went to travel, I usually take pictures and save the memories.

✓ Yes, I like it. Especially when I travel, I usually take pictures to save the memories.

The original sentence mixes past tense 'went' with present habitual action and repeats words. Use present simple 'when I travel' for habitual actions and add 'it' as the object of 'like'. Remove redundancy and use 'to save' to express purpose.

× I prefer views in rural areas because the nature is very beautiful.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because nature is very beautiful.

The noun 'nature' is uncountable and usually does not take the definite article 'the' when speaking generally. Removing 'the' makes the sentence natural when expressing a general quality.

× For example, I usually go mountains and take pictures.

✓ For example, I usually go to the mountains and take pictures.

The verb 'go' requires the preposition 'to' before a specific place: 'go to the mountains'. Without 'to' the sentence is ungrammatical. Also include the definite article 'the' with 'mountains' when speaking about mountain areas in general.

× The views are very beautiful and then I enjoy the nature.

✓ The views are very beautiful, and I enjoy nature.

'Then' is unnecessary here and 'the nature' should be 'nature' for general statements. Use a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses.

× I prefer views in my country because Japanese country.

✓ I prefer views in my country because it is Japan.

The original phrase 'Japanese country' is awkward and ungrammatical. Use a clause 'it is Japan' or 'because my country is Japan' to state the reason clearly.

× Japanese views are very beautiful.

✓ Japanese views are very beautiful.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It correctly uses the adjective 'beautiful' to describe 'views'.

× For example, I like UMM shrine and temple views.

✓ For example, I like shrine and temple views, such as those at UMM.

The original sentence places 'UMM' awkwardly. Reordering makes the sentence clearer. Also 'shrine and temple views' is fine; specify location 'at UMM' for clarity.

× They are very, uh, grateful and uh, brave beautiful.

✓ They are very beautiful and impressive.

Words like 'grateful' and 'brave' do not appropriately describe views. Use adjectives such as 'beautiful' and 'impressive' or 'majestic'. Remove filler 'uh'.