Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 在回答中，你表达了喜好并给出理由和例子，但存在语法错误、重复填词（如“umm”）和句子不够连贯的问题。改进点：1) 修正语法（主谓一致，例如“they make me feel relaxed”）；2) 删除或减少口头语，保持流畅；3) 使用连接词自然衔接观点（例如“because”、“for example”）；4) 在5句内用更具体的细节丰富描述（例如拍摄时间、光线或具体景物）。示例句型：开篇直接给出主题句，接着用because说明原因，再用具体例子和简短结论。

예시: I love taking landscape photos because natural scenes often have calming colors and interesting compositions. For example, when I visited Xinjiang last year I photographed mountain ranges at sunrise, which created warm light and dramatic shadows. These kinds of views relax me and inspire me to take more pictures.

제안: 回答展示了观点但未完成，表达含糊且有多处不准确和语法错误，并频繁使用填词。改进点：1) 给出完整的句子并直接回答（e.g. I prefer urban views when...）；2) 减少口头语，注意人称和短语搭配（e.g. “when I’m hanging out with friends”）；3) 使用连接词对比不同情况（e.g. “however, when I want peace, I prefer rural areas because...”）；4) 提供具体细节（如摩天大楼的夜景、乡村的宁静）。

예시: It depends on my mood and company. When I'm hanging out with friends I prefer urban views, such as skyscrapers and city lights, because they feel lively and offer many photo opportunities. However, when I want peace, I prefer rural areas for their quiet scenery and natural textures.

제안: 回答不完整且语法混乱，含糊不清且有大量停顿词。改进点：1) 直接用一两句明确表态（e.g. I prefer views in my own country）；2) 给出清晰具体的理由（如 travel cost, familiarity, cultural connection）；3) 用连接词扩展并总结观点；4) 避免碎片化表达，保持句子完整且限定在5句内。

예시: I prefer views in my own country because traveling there is cheaper and I know the best spots. Also, being familiar with the culture and language makes it easier to explore hidden places and take better photos. For these reasons, I usually choose domestic destinations.

× I definitely like taking pictures of landscape.

✓ I definitely like taking pictures of landscapes.

原句中“landscape”用作可数名词时需使用复数或加冠词。因为学生表示泛指“各种风景”，应使用复数“landscapes”。建议：当表达泛指类别时用复数（pictures of landscapes）。

× they're really beautiful and makes me feel relaxed.

✓ they're really beautiful and make me feel relaxed.

原句主语是复数代词“they”，谓语动词应与复数主语一致，使用“make”而不是“makes”。建议：注意主语为复数时动词用原形（第三人称复数无-s）。

× For example, in Xinjiang.

✓ For example, I have taken many photos in Xinjiang.

原句为不完整的短语，缺少谓语，造成句子残缺。需要补全动词和宾语使句子完整。建议：将地点短语补入完整句子中，如“I have taken many photos in Xinjiang.”

× Honestly it really depends on my mood and The Who umm with.

✓ Honestly, it really depends on my mood and who I am with.

原句中“The Who”不符合语法，且结构混乱。应使用宾格从句“who I am with”或更正式的“who I’m with”。建议：用正确的关系代词和合适词序表达“和谁在一起”即“who I am with”。

× If I'm with hanging out with my friends I prefer to go for city views like skyscraper or not Night Lights.

✓ If I'm hanging out with my friends, I prefer to go for city views like skyscrapers or night lights.

原句“with hanging out”多余“with”，并且“skyscraper”应为复数“skyscrapers”；“not Night Lights”结构错误，应为“night lights”。建议：删去多余介词，名词与泛指一致用复数，注意大小写和词序。

× If.

✓ (删除该残句)

单独的“If.”是不完整句子，缺乏从句或主句，需删除或补全。建议：避免留下断句或不完整条件句。

× Personally, I prefer enjoy.

✓ Personally, I prefer my own country.

原句“prefer enjoy”结构错误，动词“prefer”后要接名词或动名词，但此处语境应表达“更喜欢自己的国家”。建议：使用“prefer + 名词短语”或“prefer + doing”。

× My own contributes because I think they're umm, much cheaper for me and so I.

✓ My own country does because I think it's much cheaper for me, so I...

原句“My own contributes”用词错误，应为“My own country does”或“My own country is better”。此外“they're”指代不清，“country”是单数应使用“it”而非“they”。句尾“and so I.”不完整。建议：用正确的名词和代词一致（country→it），并补全句子。