Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity, grammar and fluency. Start with a clear topic sentence, reduce fillers (uh, umm), correct verb forms and article use, and add one brief specific detail using a linking phrase. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, I often photograph mountains and the sea because their contrasting colors and textures make my photos more beautiful and unique.

제안: Be more concise and use plural/singular correctly. Begin with a direct topic sentence, avoid hesitation sounds, and give a specific reason using a linking word (e.g., because or since). Limit to 1–2 supporting sentences.

예시: I prefer views in urban areas. This is because cities offer diverse scenes like modern architecture and lively street life, which I find more interesting to photograph.

제안: Remove hesitations and tighten grammar. State your preference clearly, give a specific example and a brief reason, and use correct plural forms and articles. Keep answers natural and within 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer views in my own country. For instance, Vietnam has many stunning landscapes such as mountains and beaches, so I feel more connected and inspired when photographing them.

× I really like taking pictures of different views that gets mountain or the sea because it's make my picture more uh, beautiful and uh umm, unique.

✓ I really like taking pictures of different views that include mountains or the sea because they make my pictures more beautiful and unique.

Errors: 'gets mountain or the sea' is incorrect word choice/structure and singular/plural problems: 'mountain' should be plural 'mountains' and 'the sea' can stay singular but should be part of 'include'. 'it's make my picture' mixes singular 'it' with plural verb and mismatches subject: the views (plural) make the pictures. Also 'picture' should be plural to match general meaning. Suggestion: use 'include' to link 'views' with 'mountains or the sea', change nouns to correct number, and ensure subject-verb agreement: 'they make my pictures'. Specific improvements: replace 'gets' with 'include', use plural 'mountains', change 'it's make' to 'they make', and use plural 'pictures'.

× Umm uh, to be honest, I prefer views in umm, urban area more than rural area because in urban area, uh, it has many incredible sceneries for everyone to view.

✓ To be honest, I prefer views in urban areas more than in rural areas because urban areas have many incredible scenes for everyone to see.

Errors: 'urban area' and 'rural area' should be plural when speaking generally; using singular makes the sentence unnatural (Singular and plural issue). 'it has many incredible sceneries' uses 'it' to refer to 'urban area' and 'sceneries' is an unnatural plural form; 'scenery' is an uncountable noun or use 'scenes'. Also 'it has' is acceptable for singular but after making areas plural, subject-verb agreement requires 'areas have'. Suggestion: pluralize nouns ('urban areas', 'rural areas'), change 'it has' to 'urban areas have', and use 'scenes' or 'scenery' correctly. Also remove filler words and unnecessary commas.

× MMM uh, uh, I think that I prefer views in my country more than, uh, other countries because in Vietnam we have a lot of incredible sceneries like mountain or beach and it's so amazing.

✓ I think I prefer views in my country more than in other countries because in Vietnam we have a lot of incredible scenery like mountains and beaches, and it's amazing.

Errors: 'a lot of incredible sceneries' is incorrect because 'scenery' is an uncountable noun (use 'a lot of incredible scenery') or use 'scenes'. 'like mountain or beach' should use plural nouns 'mountains and beaches' when speaking generally. Also 'prefer views in my country more than, uh, other countries' needs 'in' before 'other countries'. 'it's so amazing' is conversational but fine; keep 'amazing'. Suggestion: insert 'in' before 'other countries', use 'scenery' or pluralize specific features, and remove fillers for clarity.