Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap doğrudan soruyu yanıtlıyor fakat dilbilgisi hataları, tekrarlar ve belirsiz ifadeler var. Cümleleri daha doğal ve akıcı hale getirmek için tekrarları kaldırın, ‘check those memories’ gibi yanlış veya garip ifadeleri düzeltin ve bir destekleyici neden veya kısa örnek ekleyin. Ayrıca maksimum 5 cümle kuralına uyun ve bağlantı ifadeleri (for example, because, so) kullanın.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me preserve memories. For example, when I travel I take landscape shots to remember the colors and atmosphere of each place. I also find photography interesting because it makes me notice small details I would otherwise miss.

제안: Cevap net ama kelime seçimi ve tekrarlar sorunlu (‘I propose’ yanlış kullanım; ‘keeping keeping’ tekrar). Daha uygun fiiller kullanın (prefer, enjoy) ve nedenleri mantıklı bağlantı ifadeleriyle verin. Spesifik örnekler ekleyerek cevabı zenginleştirin ve cümle sayısını 3–4 ile sınırlayın.

예시: I prefer both urban and rural views because each offers something unique. For instance, urban areas have interesting architecture and street life, while rural areas offer peaceful landscapes and natural light. Therefore, I like to photograph both when I travel.

제안: Cevap karışık ve bazı kelimeler yanlış kullanılmış (‘I prefer gold’ anlamsız). Konuyu açıkça ifade edin, gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın ve nedenlerinizi mantıklı bağlaçlarla sıralayın. Bir veya iki kısa cümleyle hem yerel hem yabancı manzaraların cazibesini karşılaştırın ve somut bir örnek verin.

예시: I enjoy views in both my country and abroad for different reasons. My home country has familiar scenes and personal memories, while other countries offer new landscapes and cultures to photograph. For example, I love photographing coastal villages at home but also enjoy city skylines when I travel.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I like to check those memories, like forever. Oh, and it's interesting.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I like to keep those memories forever. Oh, and it's interesting.

The student used 'check those memories' and 'like forever' incorrectly. Use 'keep those memories forever' to express preserving memories. Also remove the filler 'like' before 'forever'. Suggestion: replace incorrect verb + filler with 'keep' and place 'forever' after the object.

× I propose views in both of them because I like visiting other countries or cities and taking all of their pictures and keeping keeping them.

✓ I prefer views in both because I like visiting other countries and cities, taking pictures of them, and keeping them.

'I propose views in both of them' is incorrect; 'prefer' expresses preference. 'Both of them' is unnecessary after 'both'. Repeated 'keeping' is an error. Use a parallel gerund structure: 'visiting..., taking..., and keeping...'. Also change 'taking all of their pictures' to 'taking pictures of them' for clarity.

× It's interesting to see all kinds of views in different kind of places.

✓ It's interesting to see all kinds of views in different kinds of places.

Mismatch between singular 'kind' and plural 'kinds' causes error. Use plural 'kinds' after 'different' and plural 'places' is already correct. Suggestion: use 'different kinds of places' for grammatical agreement.

× I prefer gold because there are a lot of beautiful views in my country, and I know that there are a lot of different kinds of views in other countries, so I would prefer both of them and I would like to visit those places and take a lot of pictures and keep, uh, them as memory.

✓ I prefer home because there are a lot of beautiful views in my country, and I know there are many different kinds of views in other countries, so I would prefer both and would like to visit those places, take a lot of pictures, and keep them as memories.

'I prefer gold' is likely a mispronunciation; 'home' or 'my country' fits context. 'Both of them' is unnecessary after 'both'. 'Keep, uh, them as memory' has filler 'uh' and wrong singular 'memory' — use 'memories'. Also streamline pronouns and parallel verb forms: 'visit ..., take ..., and keep ... as memories'. Suggestion: replace incorrect word with 'home' or 'my country', remove fillers, and use plural 'memories'.