Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, especially), correct grammar (use gerund or present continuous consistently), and reduce repetition. Add one specific detail to support your preference and use a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I love photographing different views. In particular, I find sea views the most beautiful because the changing light and waves create dramatic compositions, so I often visit the coast at sunrise to capture vibrant colors.

제안: Be direct and grammatical: begin with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, avoid repetition and fillers, correct comparative structures and adjective forms (e.g., 'harder' needs a clear comparison), and give a specific reason with a linking word (e.g., 'because' or 'since'). Limit to 2–3 concise supporting sentences.

예시: I usually prefer rural areas because the natural landscapes are well preserved and offer unique photo opportunities. For example, I enjoy photographing untouched fields and forests since they require patience to find interesting compositions.

제안: Make the response fluent and grammatically correct: state your preference clearly, avoid filler sounds, use proper verb forms and articles, and give a brief, specific reason (e.g., cultural variety or different architecture). Use a linking phrase like 'because' or 'as' to connect ideas.

예시: I prefer photographing views abroad because different countries offer diverse cultures and architectures that inspire new perspectives. For instance, I like capturing both historic European streets and remote countryside scenes when I travel.

× Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. Uh, especially. Views of the sea are the most beautiful types of view and I enjoying taking pictures of of them specifically.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of different views, especially views of the sea, which are the most beautiful, and I enjoy taking pictures of them specifically.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'I enjoying' should be 'I enjoy' (rule: after subject use base form with present simple), repeated word 'of of', sentence fragments and awkward structure. Suggestion: combine fragments into one sentence, use 'enjoy' not 'enjoying' after subject, remove duplicate word, and use relative clause 'which are...' to describe views of the sea. Grammar problem type IDs applicable: 8 (Verb + -ing form) and 9 (Verb in the past participle form) but primary is 8.

× Usually I prefer views in rural rural areas, uh, because they're intact nature there and it's much more harder to get a nicer photo, which I find very hard to do, and it's just as much as challenging as doing the new thing every day.

✓ Usually I prefer views in rural areas because the nature there is intact, and it is much harder to get a good photo, which I find challenging, as if doing something new every day.

Errors: repeated word 'rural rural', incorrect phrase 'they're intact nature there' (word order and pronoun use), awkward comparative 'much more harder' (double comparative; use 'much harder' or 'more difficult'), and clumsy final clause. Suggestions: remove duplicate words, reorder to 'the nature there is intact', avoid double comparatives, replace 'nicer' with 'good' or 'better' according to meaning, and simplify the ending to 'challenging, as if doing something new every day.' Grammar problem type IDs applicable: 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions), 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns), 5/6 (tense not primary issue) and 26 (Sentence structure errors). Primary: 11.

× As a traveler, I always prefer going to another country, take pictures of other urban cities and rural rural areas as well. So I would choose the UH doing photos abroad.

✓ As a traveler, I always prefer going to other countries and taking pictures of urban and rural areas. So I would choose to take photos abroad.

Errors: inconsistent verb forms 'prefer going... , take pictures' should parallel with gerunds ('going... and taking'), repeated 'rural rural', awkward phrase 'the UH doing photos abroad' (nonsensical filler). Suggestions: use parallel gerunds after 'prefer' ('going' and 'taking'), use plural 'countries' if general, remove repeated words, and replace filler with 'choose to take photos abroad.' Grammar problem type IDs applicable: 8 (Verb + -ing form), 18 (order not primary), 26 (Sentence structure errors). Primary: 8.