Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Pronunciation and grammar need correction and your answer should be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct word choices (e.g., 'views' not 'wheels'), and use past tense properly when describing a past trip. Limit to up to five sentences and add one or two specific details (what you photographed and why it mattered) using linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me remember my travels. For example, last month I went to northern Thailand and I often photographed mountain landscapes and local markets. I like capturing details like the colors of the sky and traditional architecture because they remind me of the trip.

제안: Improve word choice and fluency: use 'views' not 'wheels' and plural/singular agreement ('rural areas'). Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add specific supporting details and a linking word to improve coherence. Avoid fillers like 'uh' and unnecessary repetition.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because there are many green hills and beautiful rivers. For instance, I enjoy scenes of terraced fields and quiet riverside paths, which feel peaceful compared with busy city streets.

제안: There are several vocabulary and grammar errors that make your meaning unclear ('whales' and 'bread' are incorrect). Clarify that you prefer views in other countries, name reasons specifically, and use correct tense and articles. Provide 2–3 supporting details and link them logically (use 'because' or 'for example').

예시: I prefer views in other countries, especially Japan, because I have seen many beautiful photos online. For example, Japanese landscapes often feature dense forests, clear rivers and atmospheric night scenes, which inspire me to visit and take similar photos.

× Yes, I love to taking pictures of different wheels because it's a good memory for me when I have a chance to travel in many places.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because they are good memories for me when I have a chance to travel to many places.

Use of 'love to taking' is incorrect; after 'love' use base verb + -ing ('love taking') or 'love to take'. Also 'wheels' is likely a wrong word choice for 'views'; replace with 'views'. 'It's a good memory' should be plural 'they are good memories' because 'pictures' is plural. 'Travel in many places' should be 'travel to many places' since we use 'travel to' with destinations.

× So, for example, last month I go work to the northern part of Thailand, I often take a photo.

✓ So, for example, last month I went to work in the northern part of Thailand, and I often took photos.

The sentence refers to a past time 'last month', so verbs must be in the past tense: 'go' -> 'went'. Use 'went to work' or 'went for work' and 'in the northern part' is more natural than 'to the northern part' in this context. 'I often take a photo' should be past 'I often took photos' and plural 'photos' matches repeated action. Also add 'and' to connect clauses properly.

× I prefer wheels in rural area because I think uh there are lots of green hills and beautiful river so I love to and would like to go the rural area.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I think there are lots of green hills and beautiful rivers, so I would love to go to the rural areas.

Replace 'wheels' with 'views'. Use plural 'rural areas' to match 'lots of hills' and general preference. 'Beautiful river' should be plural 'beautiful rivers' or 'a beautiful river' depending on meaning; plural fits here. 'I love to and would like to go the rural area' is awkward; use 'I would love to go to rural areas'. Include preposition 'to' after 'go' and use articles/plurals correctly.

× Actually I prefer whales in other country, especially Japan because I have bread on the Internet.

✓ Actually I prefer places in other countries, especially Japan, because I saw them on the Internet.

'Whales' is a wrong word; likely intended 'places' or 'views'. 'Other country' should be plural 'other countries' when speaking generally. 'I have bread on the Internet' is nonsensical; likely intended 'I saw them on the Internet' or 'I read about them'. Use past tense 'saw' if referring to something encountered online.

× I saw the views from Japan is very nice, surrounded by beautiful forest and beautiful river and also night.

✓ I saw that the views of Japan are very nice, surrounded by beautiful forests and rivers, and also beautiful at night.

The clause 'I saw the views from Japan is very nice' has a structure error; use 'I saw that' and match plural subject-verb agreement: 'views... are'. Use plural 'forests and rivers' to match 'views'. 'And also night' is incomplete; clarify with 'and also beautiful at night'.