Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and keep it concise (max 3–4 short sentences). Add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. For example, say why photos are meaningful and give a short example of when you take them.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photos help me remember special moments. For example, when I travel I always photograph landscapes and street scenes, so my photo library is full of memories.

제안: Improve clarity and accuracy: use correct nouns and adjectives (views, rings? → greenery), correct phrasing (make me feel refreshed), and add a linking word to expand one clear reason with a specific detail. Avoid vague phrases like “a lot of insect” and explain briefly.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because the greenery and open space make me feel refreshed. For instance, I enjoy seeing rice fields and hearing birds, and there is less city noise and pollution.

제안: Make sentences grammatically correct and more natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail linked with a connector (for example). Use correct plural/singular forms and verbs (rice fields, mountains, makes me feel).

예시: I prefer views in my own country because Japan has many rice fields and large mountains. For example, walking in the countryside there makes me feel calm and relaxed.

× Yes, taking picture of different views can remind me my memories.

✓ Yes, taking pictures of different views can remind me of my memories.

The noun should be plural 'pictures' to match 'different views' (agreement) and the verb 'remind' requires the preposition 'of' before 'my memories'. Use plural for count nouns and include the correct preposition: 'taking pictures...remind me of my memories.'

× So I like taking pictures every travel so my photo for the is always full.

✓ So I like taking pictures on every trip, so my photo collection is always full.

Several errors: 'travel' as a countable event should be 'trip'; use the preposition 'on' with 'every trip'. 'photo for the is always full' is ungrammatical—likely 'photo collection is always full'. Correct plurality: 'pictures' and 'collection'.

× I prefer view in rural areas because they have a lot of ring so they lead me more refreshed and I can see more a lot of insect without Urban Air.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because there are a lot of trees, so they make me feel more refreshed and I can see many insects without urban air pollution.

Multiple issues: 'view' should be plural 'views'. Use 'there are' for existence of many items (Grammar problem type 3 and plural). 'ring' seems to be intended 'trees'. 'lead me more refreshed' should be 'make me feel more refreshed' (verb choice and adverb/adjective use). 'more a lot of insect' incorrect quantifier and plural—use 'many insects'. 'Urban Air' should be 'urban air pollution' and lowercased. I corrected to maintain meaning and grammatical forms.

× Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries? Student: I prefer view in my country.

✓ I prefer views in my country.

'view' should be plural 'views' to match the question and general preference. Use plural for general statements about types of scenes.

× Japan has a lot of rice field and large mountain.

✓ Japan has a lot of rice fields and large mountains.

Countable nouns 'rice field' and 'mountain' need plural forms 'rice fields' and 'mountains' when preceded by 'a lot of'. Also maintain parallel plural forms in the list.

× The view lead me more comfortable and relaxed, so I like in.

✓ The views make me more comfortable and relaxed, so I like them.

Subject-verb agreement: 'view' vs 'views' and verb 'lead' is incorrect; use 'make' + adjective. Use object pronoun 'them' to refer back to 'views' rather than 'in'. The structure 'make me comfortable' is standard.