Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically correct, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix tense and article errors, and avoid redundancy.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially when I visit new places. For example, I often photograph the surrounding streets and landscapes to capture the atmosphere, because photos help me remember what a place looked like.

제안: Provide a complete, fluent sentence as the main idea and connect supporting detail with linking words. Correct sentence fragments and use appropriate vocabulary (e.g., countryside, expansive landscapes, wildlife).

예시: Although both have their merits, I prefer countryside views because I can photograph expansive landscapes and a variety of wildlife, which feel more peaceful and photogenic.

제안: Make sentences grammatically correct and specific. Use linking words to show contrast and reasons. Avoid vague phrases like 'make the tree more enjoyable'—use precise nouns. Mention a concrete example of what you enjoy abroad.

예시: Both my country and others have beautiful landscapes, but I usually prefer views abroad because traveling lets me experience different cultures and scenery. For instance, photographing traditional architecture and unfamiliar natural formations in another country feels more exciting and memorable.

× Yes, I like taking picture of different views, especially when I visit new places.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, especially when I visit new places.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because 'different views' implies multiple images; use plural to match. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to more than one item or a general activity of taking multiple pictures.

× I often photograph the surroundings and the landscapes because I enjoy capturing the atmosphere and I want to.

✓ I often photograph the surroundings and the landscapes because I enjoy capturing the atmosphere and I want to remember it.

The sentence ends with 'I want to.' which lacks an object or verb; use a present infinitive phrase 'to remember it' to complete the thought. Also 'remembering what the place I look like' follows, so make this consistent. Suggestion: complete verbs with appropriate objects or infinitive phrases.

× Remembering what the place I look like.

✓ I try to remember what the place looks like.

This fragment lacks a proper subject-verb structure and uses incorrect word order. Use 'I try to remember' as the main clause and 'what the place looks like' as the object clause with correct subject-verb order ('place looks'). Suggestion: ensure each sentence has a subject and a finite verb; for reported content use 'what' + subject + verb.

× Both have their own value, but I would say I enjoy.

✓ Both have their own value, but I would say I enjoy them.

The clause 'I enjoy' is incomplete because it needs an object; here 'them' refers back to 'both' (urban and rural views). Suggestion: include the appropriate pronoun or noun as the object of 'enjoy'.

× Countryside views This is because I can take photo of extensive landscape and various nature.

✓ I prefer countryside views because I can take photos of extensive landscapes and varied natural scenery.

The original contains a sentence fragment and awkward phrasing. Combine into one sentence and correct nouns to plural ('photos', 'landscapes') and use 'varied natural scenery' instead of 'various nature'. Also remove the stray 'This is'. Suggestion: link clauses properly and match noun forms and collocations ('natural scenery').

× Both places have a beautiful landscapes, but I usually prefer views in other country because traveling abroad feels more meaningful.

✓ Both places have beautiful landscapes, but I usually prefer views in other countries because traveling abroad feels more meaningful.

Mismatch: 'a beautiful landscapes' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' and use 'landscapes'. 'Other country' should be plural 'other countries' when speaking generally. Suggestion: ensure articles agree with singular/plural nouns and use plural when referring to countries in general.

× When I visit a foreign country, I can experience different culture and landscape which make the tree more enjoyable.

✓ When I visit a foreign country, I can experience different cultures and landscapes, which make the trip more enjoyable.

Several article and word errors: 'different culture and landscape' should be plural 'cultures and landscapes' when speaking generally. 'make the tree' is likely a typo for 'trip'. Also add a comma before the non-restrictive relative clause. Suggestion: use plural forms for general categories and check for typos; include commas for non-restrictive clauses.

× When I visit a foreign country, I can experience different culture and landscape which make the tree more enjoyable.

✓ When I visit a foreign country, I can experience different cultures and landscapes, which make the trip more enjoyable.

The relative clause 'which make' must agree with its antecedent. 'Cultures and landscapes' are plural, so 'make' is correct; ensure the antecedent is plural as corrected. Previously 'culture and landscape' singular would require 'makes', but the intended meaning is plural. Suggestion: ensure subject number matches verb form in relative clauses.