Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and use clearer, grammatical sentences. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., “travel” used twice) and correct grammar (e.g., “travel to somewhere” → “travel somewhere”).

예시: Yes, I love taking photos of different views. For example, when I travel I always photograph landscapes to help me remember special moments, and I often share the best pictures and short videos on social media so my friends can see them.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and correct grammar. Use linking words (e.g., "because," "for example") and avoid vague phrases like "make me feel more." Provide one concrete example to illustrate the feeling.

예시: I prefer rural views because they help me relax and recharge. For example, waking up to a river or mountain view calms me and lets me start the day with a clear mind.

제안: This answer repeats previous points and confuses the question about domestic vs foreign views. Directly address whether you prefer views in your own country or abroad, then give a brief reason and an example. Fix grammar (e.g., "make me" → "make me feel"). Avoid irrelevant phrases like "less trash."

예시: I prefer views in other countries because seeing unfamiliar landscapes gives me a sense of discovery. For example, a beach in another country felt more exciting and peaceful than beaches I’ve seen at home, and that made the trip memorable.

× Whenever I travel to somewhere, I think there is a chance for me to remember all special moments and destinations that I travel.

✓ Whenever I travel somewhere, I think there is a chance for me to remember all the special moments and destinations I visit.

The phrase 'travel to somewhere' is unidiomatic; use 'travel somewhere'. The clause 'destinations that I travel' incorrectly uses 'travel' where 'visit' is the appropriate verb for places. Also add the definite article 'the' before 'special moments' to specify them. Use of present simple 'travel' and 'visit' fits the habitual action. Suggestion: use 'travel somewhere' and 'visit' for places, and include articles when referring to specific items.

× And I also post a lot of videos and photos on social media sharing for my friends.

✓ I also post a lot of videos and photos on social media to share with my friends.

The phrase 'sharing for my friends' uses an incorrect preposition and verb form. Use the infinitive 'to share' to express purpose and the preposition 'with' to indicate the recipients. Suggestion: use 'to share with' when indicating you publish content so friends can see it.

× Personally I like views in rural areas because it make me feel more relaxed and refreshed.

✓ Personally, I like views in rural areas because they make me feel more relaxed and refreshed.

The pronoun 'it' does not agree with plural noun 'views'; use 'they'. The verb 'make' must agree with the plural subject 'they' (they make). Also add a comma after 'Personally' for clarity. Suggestion: match pronouns and verbs to the number (singular/plural) of the noun.

× Just imagine when I wake up and then seeing the view from the river, mountains or beaches is make me feel more.

✓ Just imagine when I wake up and then see the view of the river, mountains, or beach; it makes me feel better.

The sequence 'wake up and then seeing' mixes verb forms; after 'wake up' use the base verb 'see'. 'Is make me feel more' is ungrammatical — use 'it makes me feel better' or 'it makes me feel more relaxed'. Also use singular 'beach' or parallel plural 'rivers, mountains, or beaches' consistently and 'of' for relationship ('view of the river'). Suggestion: keep parallel verb forms and proper subject-verb agreement, and choose a clear comparative/adverb like 'better' or 'more relaxed'.

× Personally, I prefer views in rural areas because it make me feel more relaxed and refreshed compared to the views from rural city life.

✓ Personally, I prefer views in rural areas because they make me feel more relaxed and refreshed compared to views from city life.

Again 'it' does not agree with plural 'views'; use 'they' and 'make'. 'Rural city life' is contradictory and awkward; use 'city life' or 'urban life'. Also 'the views from' can be simplified to 'views from' or 'views in'. Suggestion: ensure pronoun-verb agreement and use appropriate nouns ('city life' instead of 'rural city life').

× Umm for example like waking up and seeing the river, mountains or the beach feel more calming and have me start the day with less trash.

✓ For example, waking up and seeing the river, mountains, or the beach feels calming and helps me start the day more peacefully.

The structure 'waking up and seeing ... feel' is incorrect because the gerund phrase ('waking up and seeing the river, mountains, or the beach') is treated as a singular idea, so use 'feels'. 'Have me start the day with less trash' is unclear and ungrammatical; likely intended meaning is 'helps me start the day more peacefully' or 'with less stress'. Replace 'trash' with 'stress' or 'clutter' depending on meaning. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement for gerund phrases and use appropriate vocabulary for intended meaning.