Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Good content and clear meaning, but the answer is a little wordy and has minor grammar issues. Make the response more concise, correct small errors (e.g., use "I don't" not "I do not" for natural speech, and "so I can choose the best one"), and use one linking phrase to connect sentences (e.g., "because" or "so"). Aim for 2–3 sentences and a varied verb like "photograph."

예시: Yes, I do. When I'm in parks or museums I usually take several photos from different angles because that way I can choose the best one later.

제안: The response answers the question but is unclear at the start and contains grammatical mistakes (subject-verb agreement: "rural areas weren't" or "wasn't my thing" -> "weren't my thing" or "wasn't for me"). Begin with a clear topic sentence stating preference (e.g., "I prefer urban views"), then give concise supporting details and a linking word (e.g., "because"). Reduce redundancy and keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer urban views because I grew up surrounded by cities, skyscrapers and large parks. The architecture and busy streets are more interesting to photograph than quiet rural scenes.

제안: Meaning is understandable but the answer is confused and contains unclear phrasing ("rather than four in one") and slightly long-winded structure. Start with a direct statement ("I prefer views in my own city"), give two specific reasons with linking words ("because" and "also"), and avoid vague/incorrect expressions. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and include a specific example to strengthen the answer.

예시: I prefer views in my own city because I find the familiar landmarks and local parks more meaningful. For example, I love photographing the old town square at sunset since it reminds me of home.

× When I'm out in parks or in museums and I'm trying to capture something, I do not take only one picture.

✓ When I'm out in parks or museums and trying to capture something, I do not take just one picture.

The original sentence has unnecessary repeated subjects and awkward phrasing. Using the -ing form once ('trying') after the main clause is sufficient. Also, 'only one picture' is more naturally 'just one picture'. Suggestion: eliminate the repeated 'I'm' and use 'just' for natural collocation.

× I always try to capture the item from the different perspectives so I could choose the better picture.

✓ I always try to capture the subject from different perspectives so I can choose the best picture.

Problems: 'the item' is an odd choice; 'different' does not need 'the'; 'so I could' is incorrect for present intent—use 'so I can'; 'better picture' should be 'best picture' when comparing multiple options. Suggestion: use 'subject' or 'scene', drop 'the' before 'different perspectives', and use 'can' and 'best' for clarity.

× Yes, I would say so.

✓ Yes, I would.

The examiner asked a preference; 'Yes, I would say so' is vague and unnecessary. 'Yes, I would' is more direct and idiomatic. Suggestion: keep answers concise and directly address the question.

× Since I was a kid I've always been surrounded by cities, buildings, skyscrapers, shopping malls and huge parks with green areas.

✓ Since I was a kid I've always been surrounded by cities, buildings, skyscrapers, shopping malls, and large parks with green areas.

Tense is acceptable (present perfect with 'since'), but punctuation and word choice: add a comma before 'and' in a list and 'huge' is informal—'large' is better. Suggestion: maintain present perfect for continuing states and use consistent list punctuation.

× So rural areas wasn't my thing at all.

✓ So rural areas weren't my thing at all.

The subject 'rural areas' is plural, so the verb must be plural: 'were' not 'was'. Suggestion: match verb number to subject number ('areas' -> 'weren't').

× Well, I've been to several countries for the last 10 years and I would say that I prefer my own city rather than four in one because not only my city has beautiful places but also it is home.

✓ Well, I've been to several countries over the last ten years, and I would say that I prefer my own city to any of them because not only does my city have beautiful places, it is also my home.

Multiple problems: 'for the last 10 years' should be 'over the last ten years' for visits during that period; 'prefer my own city rather than four in one' is unclear—likely meant 'prefer my own city to any of them'; comparative structure uses 'prefer X to Y'. The clause 'not only my city has beautiful places but also it is home' is ungrammatical—use 'not only does my city have beautiful places, it is also my home.' Suggestion: restructure sentence for clarity, use correct comparative ('prefer X to Y'), add auxiliary 'does' in 'not only' inversion, and write numbers in words in formal speech.