Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence stating that you enjoy taking photos, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect articles or phrasing (e.g., "the these"). Keep to 2–3 sentences and use simple, correct grammar.

예시: I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they remind me of special moments. For example, I photograph landscapes and historic sites when I travel so I can remember the atmosphere and share the memories with my family.

제안: Clarify your preference and give coherent, specific reasons. Use linking words like "because" or "although" to connect ideas. Avoid unclear vocabulary and irrelevant phrases (e.g., "Rashid areas", "used graphics"). Limit to 2–3 clear sentences describing features you like in urban or rural views.

예시: I prefer urban views because cities have interesting architecture, public parks and cultural attractions. For instance, I enjoy photographing city streets and modern buildings, and I also like urban parks where I can capture people and nature together.

제안: Be direct and avoid fillers ("uh"). Give a clear topic sentence stating preference and one specific reason or example (e.g., discovering different cultures or landscapes). Use a linking phrase like "because" and correct collocations ("see new places" rather than "slow new things"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I have already seen many places at home and I want to discover different cultures and landscapes. For example, I enjoy visiting coastal towns abroad to photograph unfamiliar architecture and local life.

× Yes, I would like to take a picture of different views because the these are necessary blessings of Allah Almighty and we must visit them and capture them as and keep them as a memory.

✓ Yes, I would like to take pictures of different views because these are necessary blessings of Allah Almighty, and we must visit them and capture them to keep them as memories.

Errors: incorrect article use ('the these'), singular/plural mismatch ('a picture' vs 'pictures'), awkward phrasing ('capture them as and keep them as a memory'). Correction details: remove redundant article 'the' before 'these', change 'a picture' to plural 'pictures' to match 'different views', replace 'capture them as and keep them as a memory' with 'capture them to keep them as memories'. Suggestion: check noun number agreement and avoid redundant articles; use 'to' + verb to show purpose and make plural nouns agree with context. Grammar problem type's ID:22

× So I would like to take care of different views and store as a memory in my future.

✓ So I would like to take care of different views and store them as memories for the future.

Errors: missing object 'them' after 'store', 'as a memory' should be plural 'as memories' and 'in my future' is incorrect preposition/phrase. Correction details: add 'them', change to plural 'memories', and use 'for the future'. Suggestion: ensure verbs have clear objects and use standard time expressions like 'for the future'. Grammar problem type's ID:1

× I would like to prefer urban areas because in urban areas there are more space around each and every houses.

✓ I would prefer urban areas because in urban areas there is more space around each and every house.

Errors: incorrect verb phrase 'would like to prefer' (redundant), singular/plural and subject-verb agreement: 'more space' requires singular 'there is' and 'houses' should be singular if preceded by 'each and every'. Correction details: use 'I would prefer' and 'there is more space' and 'each and every house'. Suggestion: avoid redundant constructions 'would like to prefer', use 'each and every' with singular noun and match 'there is/are' to the noun phrase. Grammar problem type's ID:10

× In rural areas there are more Rashid areas there are used graphics but in urban areas all the lands are grassy and the birds are being long trees and great land every month in.

✓ In rural areas there are more rustic areas with simple structures, but in urban areas the land is mostly grassy and there are many tall trees and open spaces.

Errors: sentence is ungrammatical and incoherent ('Rashid areas', 'there are used graphics', 'birds are being long trees', 'great land every month in'). Correction details: interpret likely meaning as 'rural areas are rustic/simple; urban areas have grassy land, tall trees, open spaces' and rephrase accordingly. Suggestion: keep one clear comparison per clause, avoid literal translation errors, and ensure each clause has a clear subject and verb. Grammar problem type's ID:26

× Uh, I prefer, uh, in other countries because I visited, I mostly visited the views in my country.

✓ Uh, I prefer views in other countries because I have mostly visited the views in my country.

Errors: tense inconsistency: 'I visited, I mostly visited' is repetitive and simple past is awkward when referring to experience up to now. Correction details: use present perfect 'have mostly visited' to indicate past experiences relevant to the present. Suggestion: use present perfect for life experiences and avoid repetition. Grammar problem type's ID:6

× So I would like to prefer other country views because because every time we need to slow new things, so I would like to prefer other countries.

✓ So I would like to see views from other countries because we need to learn new things, so I prefer visiting other countries.

Errors: repeated 'because', incorrect verb 'slow' for 'learn', awkward repetition 'so I would like to prefer'. Correction details: remove duplicate conjunction, replace 'slow' with 'learn', change phrasing to 'I prefer visiting other countries'. Suggestion: avoid repeating conjunctions, use correct verb choices, and simplify by choosing one modal or preference expression. Grammar problem type's ID:16