Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and grammatically correct, keep answers concise (max 5 sentences), and give clear specific details. Correct errors (e.g., article use, plural forms) and avoid unclear phrases like “the spread St.” Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially when I'm in the mountains. For example, I like capturing the green slopes and distant valleys because the light changes throughout the day. Also, I often photograph people walking on trails to show scale and activity.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, correct small grammar mistakes (remove extra ‘the’), and expand with one or two specific supporting details using linking words for coherence.

예시: I prefer photographing urban areas because they have striking architecture. For instance, skyscrapers create interesting lines and reflections, and there are always people and street scenes that add life to the photos.

제안: State your preference clearly, correct phrasing and redundancy (e.g., avoid repeating 'structures, the buildings'), and provide a concise specific reason. Use linking words like ‘because’ and give an example to support your point.

예시: I prefer photographing views in other countries because their architecture often differs from what I’m used to. For example, when I watched documentaries about European cathedrals, I became curious to capture their ornate facades and unique construction details in my photos.

× Yes I do like it especially when I am in a mountain.

✓ Yes, I do like it, especially when I am in a mountain range.

The preposition 'in' can be used with 'a mountain' but the meaning here implies being in a mountainous area; 'a mountain' is singular and sounds unnatural with 'in' for describing scenery. Use 'in a mountain range' or 'on a mountain' depending on intended meaning. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: say 'on a mountain' if you mean the peak or 'in a mountain range' for an area.

× Then I can take an amazing pictures of the Green Mountains, the spread St. and the small people walking around.

✓ Then I can take amazing pictures of the Green Mountains, the spread street and the small people walking around.

'An' before 'amazing pictures' is incorrect because 'pictures' is plural; use no article or 'some' for plural nouns. Also 'an amazing pictures' mixes singular article with plural noun. 'Spread St.' is unclear; likely 'spread street' or 'a wide street' is intended. Suggest replacing unclear phrase with 'a wide street' or the actual street name. Maintain plural agreement: 'amazing pictures'.

× I definitely prefer to take pictures of urban areas because the I can take pictures of the skyscrapers.

✓ I definitely prefer to take pictures of urban areas because I can take pictures of the skyscrapers.

The extra definite article 'the' before 'I' is incorrect. Remove 'the' to form a grammatical subject. Also consider removing repetition 'take pictures of' for conciseness: 'because I can photograph the skyscrapers'.

× I can see many people walking around.

✓ I can see many people walking around.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present tense and matches the context. No change needed. Explanation: 'can see' (modal + base verb) correctly expresses ability; 'walking' correctly uses present participle to describe ongoing action.

× I definitely prefer to take pictures of other countries because I want to see how these structures, the buildings are built and how they are amazing, especially when I see them in documentaries, televisions.

✓ I definitely prefer to take pictures in other countries because I want to see how these structures and buildings are built and how amazing they are, especially when I see them in documentaries and on television.

Use 'in other countries' rather than 'of other countries' to indicate location. Remove the unnecessary comma between 'structures' and 'the buildings' and combine nouns: 'structures and buildings'. Word order should be 'how amazing they are' not 'how they are amazing'. Use 'on television' (preposition 'on' with 'television') and plural 'documentaries' without comma. Suggestion: simplify phrase to 'take pictures in other countries' and use 'on television'.