Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect plural forms (e.g. "views" vs "view" usage) and wordy phrases like "I like elegant picture I took."

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I find scenery inspiring. For example, I often photograph sunsets and city skylines to capture the colours and atmosphere, and I find the activity relaxing and creatively rewarding.

제안: Give a direct preference statement, or clearly state you have no strong preference, then explain with specific reasons and linking words. Remove repetition and finish sentences. Use comparative or descriptive vocabulary to contrast urban and rural views.

예시: I don't have a strong preference; I enjoy both urban and rural views. Urban areas offer dynamic architecture and lively streets, while rural areas provide peaceful landscapes and natural colours, so I choose depending on my mood and the kind of photos I want to take.

제안: Answer directly and avoid filler words (uh, umm). State a clear reason and support it with specific details or examples. Complete your sentence and explain what makes your country more appealing (landscapes, culture, accessibility).

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I'm familiar with the best spots and local seasons. For instance, I know where to find dramatic mountain vistas and historic towns at the right time of year, which makes my photos more meaningful and easier to plan.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because every views is beautiful and elegant and I like elegant picture I took and it is very enjoyable for me.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because every view is beautiful and elegant, and I like the elegant pictures I take; it is very enjoyable for me.

The phrase 'every views' incorrectly combines 'every' (which requires a singular noun) with a plural noun. Use 'every view'. 'Elegant picture I took' mixes singular and past tense inappropriately; use plural 'pictures' and present tense 'I take' to match the habitual action. Add 'the' before 'elegant pictures' to specify those pictures. Improve sentence flow with commas and a semicolon. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× Basically I prefer both, both urban areas or rural rural areas because every place is different, different, beautiful. And I like both because rural areas are natural and.

✓ Basically I prefer both urban and rural areas because every place is different and beautiful, and I like both because rural areas are natural.

The original repeats words and misuses 'both' with 'or'. Use 'both urban and rural areas' with parallel structure. 'Every place is different, different, beautiful' is redundant; remove repetition and join adjectives with 'and'. The final fragment 'and' leaves the sentence incomplete; end with 'rural areas are natural.' Grammar problem type ID: 1

× Yes, I definitely prefer uh, using my own country, umm, then uh, other countries And my country is very beautiful, umm and uh, it is uh, very.

✓ Yes, I definitely prefer my own country to other countries. My country is very beautiful, and it has many attractive views.

'Prefer using my own country, then other countries' is an incorrect structure. Use the pattern 'prefer A to B'. Also the original ends abruptly with 'it is very.' Complete the idea by specifying what 'very' modifies, for example 'has many attractive views.' Remove filler words and improve clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 11