Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your response more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific reasons using linking words, and finish with a brief concluding remark. Avoid repetition (e.g. “enjoy the clouds” said twice) and minor grammatical errors (use “take pictures of” or “photograph” consistently).

예시: I usually don't take pictures of views because I prefer to experience them in the moment. For example, when I see beautiful clouds at sunset, I like to watch the colours change rather than photograph them. So, I rarely take photos of simple scenes; I just enjoy the moment.

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your preference (or neutrality). Use linking words (for example, however, because) and provide one specific comparison showing how they differ. Correct small grammar issues: "preferred views" → "a preferred view" or "a preference", and plural/singular agreement.

예시: I don't have a strong preference because both urban and rural views appeal to me. For example, urban areas like Singapore impress me with modern architecture and city lights, while my small hometown offers peaceful landscapes and familiar streets. Therefore, I appreciate them for different reasons.

제안: Make your meaning clearer and use coherent linking. Start with a direct answer ("It depends"), explain specifically why (give a concise reason and an example), and avoid unclear phrasing like "there's a part" or contradictory statements. Fix grammar and use consistent vocabulary (e.g. "built" not "build").

예시: It depends on the country. I generally prefer views in my own country because I'm familiar with them, but sometimes new developments spoil natural scenery—for example, ugly buildings near a coastline reduce its beauty. In contrast, some foreign cities like Singapore combine modern architecture with well-designed public spaces, so they can be attractive too.

× I don't like taking pictures for any views because I just want to enjoy it, not to take pictures like the clouds every afternoon.

✓ I don't like taking pictures of views because I just want to enjoy them, not take pictures of the clouds every afternoon.

Use correct preposition 'of' with 'taking pictures' and use the plural pronoun 'them' to refer to 'views'. Also remove unnecessary 'to' after 'not'. Use 'of the clouds' to specify which clouds.

× Actually, I don't have a preferred views.

✓ Actually, I don't have a preferred view.

'Preferred' modifies a singular noun 'view' here. 'Views' is plural and conflicts with 'a'. Use singular 'view' after 'a'. Alternatively say 'preferred views' without 'a'.

× I think it's both beautiful in urban area or rural areas.

✓ I think both urban and rural areas are beautiful.

Avoid awkward 'both... in' construction. Use parallel noun phrases 'urban and rural areas' and a clear predicate 'are beautiful'. Also use plural 'areas' for 'urban'.

× I like Singapore's views and I also like my hometown view, which in a small city, I think it's both beautiful but in different ways.

✓ I like Singapore's views and I also like the view of my hometown, which is a small city; I think both are beautiful but in different ways.

Add 'the' and 'of' to form 'the view of my hometown'. Insert verb 'is' after the relative clause 'which is a small city'. Use 'both are beautiful' to refer to two things. Replace comma splice with semicolon or split into sentences.

× This depends on which country.

✓ That depends on the country.

Use 'that' to refer back to the general question and simplify 'which country' to 'the country' for natural present-tense response.

× I do like the views on my own country but The thing is they always build some ugly buildings around the natural view so there's a part.

✓ I do like the views in my own country, but the thing is they often build ugly buildings around natural areas, so that's a problem.

Use 'in' not 'on' for country. Use lowercase 'the'. 'They always build' is acceptable but 'often build' is more natural. Change 'natural view' to 'natural areas' and 'so there's a part' to 'so that's a problem'. Ensure plural/singular agreement.

× I don't like any other country like Singapore or human buildings but still pretty.

✓ I don't like other countries that have buildings like Singapore's, though some of them can still be pretty.

Clarify meaning: use 'other countries' plural and specify 'buildings like Singapore's'. Replace 'human buildings' (unclear) with 'man-made buildings' or 'urban buildings'. Add 'though' and 'can' to soften statement and correct sentence structure.