Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant and contains good content (preferences and a reason). To improve, make it more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, use one or two supporting details, and avoid redundancy (e.g., repeating that a camera cannot capture atmosphere twice). Add a linking word when giving the contrast to keep coherence. Also check word choice (use 'landscapes' plural).

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially beaches and mountains, because their colours and light are striking. However, a camera can't fully capture the atmosphere and scale, so they often seem more impressive in person.

제안: The answer communicates meaning but has grammar and word-choice errors ('contributes' instead of 'countryside' or 'rural areas') and some awkward phrasing. To improve, correct vocabulary, use a clear topic sentence stating you like both, and use linking words to contrast examples (for example, 'in the city... whereas in the countryside...'). Keep each part concise and avoid unnecessary repetition about spending the whole day. Limit to 3–4 short sentences.

예시: I like both urban and rural views. In the city I enjoy photographing skylines and night lights, whereas in the countryside I prefer peaceful landscapes and long walks to relax.

제안: The response is unclear and contains many grammatical mistakes and hesitations, which reduce clarity. Improve by giving a direct topic sentence stating your preference, provide a clear reason with one specific example, and avoid fillers like 'you know' and incomplete clauses. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'I prefer views in other countries because...') and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I usually prefer views in other countries because they offer different landscapes and cultural scenes I haven't seen before. For example, I enjoyed the dramatic coastlines in Portugal, which felt very different from the beaches at home.

× I enjoy both city and contributes.

✓ I enjoy both the city and the countryside.

The student used 'contributes' which is incorrect. The intended contrast is between 'city' and 'countryside' (a noun meaning rural areas). Also add the definite article 'the' before 'city' and 'countryside' when referring to those environments generally. Suggestion: learn common collocations 'the city' and 'the countryside' and proofread for similar word confusions.

× In city I love photographing skylines, scenes and light at night while in rural areas I prefer the peaceful countryside and like going for a long walk to relax and spend my entire day on it.

✓ In the city, I love photographing skylines, scenes, and lights at night, while in rural areas I prefer the peaceful countryside and like going for a long walk to relax and spend my whole day there.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'city' when speaking about the general urban environment. 'Light' should be plural 'lights' to match 'skylines' and 'scenes.' 'Entire day on it' is unnatural; use 'spend my whole day there.' Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'the city' for general reference to urban areas, pluralize nouns when listing multiple items, and use 'there' for location references.

× This question make me laugh because honestly, I prefer to be in other country than my own country because, you know, our country, it's beautiful, yeah, but it's not the there's some place that you would wish not to have in your country.

✓ This question makes me laugh because honestly, I prefer to be in another country than my own, because, you know, our country is beautiful, but there are some places you might wish did not exist in your country.

Subject-verb agreement: 'This question make' should be 'makes' (third person singular). 'Other country' needs the determiner 'another country.' Remove redundant 'country' repetition after 'my own.' Use 'there are some places' rather than 'it's not the there's some place.' Also rewrite 'you would wish not to have in your country' to the more natural 'you might wish did not exist in your country.' Suggestion: check subject-verb agreement, use appropriate determiners like 'another,' and simplify redundant phrases.

× the color and light are so striking.

✓ the color and lights are so striking.

When referring to multiple aspects like color and light conditions, 'light' is better as 'lights' to match plural 'color' sensibly or change to 'color and lighting.' If keeping 'light' singular, use 'lighting' or rephrase. Suggestion: use consistent noun forms in parallel structures, e.g., 'color and lighting are so striking.'

× and like going for a long walk to relax and spend my entire day on it.

✓ and like going for a long walk to relax and spend my whole day there.

The preposition 'on' with 'it' is incorrect for expressing spending a day in a place. Use 'there' for location or 'spend my whole day doing it' for an activity. Suggestion: choose 'there' to indicate location or 'doing it' for activity, and prefer 'whole' over 'entire' in this context.