Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more precise and natural: correct minor errors (e.g., 'city scenes', not 'cities scenes'; 'capture the feel', not 'capture the food'). Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences) and focus on one or two clear reasons with a linking word. Add a specific detail or brief example to make the response vivid.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially landscapes and city scenes, because pictures capture the feel of a place and preserve memories. For example, when I visit a park, I often take several photos of the lake at sunset so I can remember the colours and calm atmosphere later.

제안: Fix grammar and word order, and use linking words to show contrast. Avoid redundancy and keep sentences natural. Be specific about what you like in each setting (sound, light, activity) and use correct expressions ('long walks', 'the architecture feels exciting').

예시: I prefer rural views because they are peaceful and help me unwind after a busy week. For instance, I enjoy long walks among rolling hills and open fields where the fresh air is relaxing. However, I also like city skylines at night because the illuminated architecture feels exciting and lively.

제안: Clarify the response and correct errors. The first sentence is unclear and contains mistakes ('What places' is wrong; 'best local spots', not 'sports'). Use a clear topic sentence, then provide contrasting detail with a linking word. Be specific about what makes foreign views novel (different flora, culture, or architecture).

예시: I prefer views in my own country because familiar places feel comforting and I know the best local spots to relax, such as a nearby valley with mountains and clear air that always refreshes me. However, I also enjoy views in other countries because they offer novel landscapes and different cultural scenes, like coastal cliffs or historic city centres that I rarely see at home.

× I especially like landscapes and cities scenes because photos help me capture the food, the mood of a place, and preserve memories.

✓ I especially like landscapes and city scenes because photos help me capture the feel, the mood of a place, and preserve memories.

'Cities scenes' is incorrect adjective form; use the adjective 'city' to modify 'scenes'. 'the food' doesn't make sense in context; likely intended 'feel' or 'atmosphere'. Replace with 'feel' to match meaning. Use parallel structure: 'capture the feel, the mood of a place, and preserve memories.' Suggestion: use adjective + noun (city scenes) and ensure words match meaning.

× I love going for a long walks in the countryside, looking at rolling hills and open fields.

✓ I love going for long walks in the countryside, looking at rolling hills and open fields.

'a long walks' mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'walks'. Remove 'a' to match plural 'walks', or change to 'a long walk'. Suggestion: choose singular or plural and ensure article agrees.

× Although occasionally I enjoy city skylines at night because there lies in the architecture feel exciting and vibrant.

✓ Although I occasionally enjoy city skylines at night because the architecture feels exciting and vibrant.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and extraneous words ('there lies in the architecture feel'). Correct structure: subject 'the architecture' + verb 'feels' + complement 'exciting and vibrant'. Move 'occasionally' to a natural position after the subject or after 'Although'. Suggestion: keep clear subject-verb-complement order and place adverbs in a natural position.

× What places in my own country feel more familiar and comforting because I know the best local sports to relax?

✓ Places in my own country feel more familiar and comforting because I know the best local spots to relax.

'What' at the start makes it a question, but the intended sentence is a statement; remove 'What'. 'sports' is incorrect word choice; use 'spots' to mean places. Also maintain declarative form to answer the question. Suggestion: use correct lexical choice and sentence type (statement vs question).

× However, I also enjoy views in other countries because they offer novel landscape.

✓ However, I also enjoy views in other countries because they offer novel landscapes.

'Landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' to agree with 'views' and 'they'. Using plural matches meaning that different countries provide various landscapes. Suggestion: ensure noun number agrees with pronoun and context.