Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để trả lời rõ ràng hơn; tránh lặp từ và tối đa 3–4 câu. Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp (Yes, I do/No, I don't). (2) Sửa các động từ sai (ví dụ: 'after using these for every food' không rõ nghĩa — có thể là 'after I eat' hay 'of food'). (3) Dùng liên từ hợp lý để nối ý (because, so) và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể về loại cảnh bạn thích chụp hoặc thiết bị bạn dùng. (4) Tránh từ thừa như 'to them' lặp lại. Ví dụ tập luyện hãy nêu một loại cảnh cụ thể và lý do ngắn gọn.

예시: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy taking landscape photos when I travel because I love capturing natural light and wide views. I usually use my smartphone and sometimes a small tripod to get steadier shots, and I often share the best images with my family so they can enjoy the scenery too.

제안: Cải thiện độ rõ ràng và ngữ pháp; sử dụng câu chủ đề trực tiếp và từ vựng chính xác (ví dụ: 'rural areas', 'peaceful', 'crowded'). Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu bằng câu trả lời rõ ràng: 'I prefer rural areas.' (2) Dùng cụm mô tả chính xác và ngắn gọn, tránh từ sai như 'uttermost'. (3) Dùng liên từ (because, so) để liên kết lý do. (4) Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: âm thanh, không khí, cảnh vật) để làm câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

예시: I prefer rural areas because they are much quieter and the air feels fresher. The countryside also offers open fields and peaceful walking paths, which I find more relaxing than crowded city streets full of traffic.

제안: Cần sửa ngữ pháp nặng và làm rõ ý chính; câu hiện tại hầu như không có nghĩa. Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu trực tiếp: 'I prefer views in my own country' hoặc 'I prefer views abroad' rồi giải thích. (2) Tránh từ sai như 'people who use', 'bills', 'taste the beast' — có thể bạn muốn nói về 'cost', 'food' hoặc 'landscapes'. (3) Nêu lý do cụ thể, ví dụ: familiarity, cultural connection, or local cuisine. (4) Giữ câu ngắn gọn (2–3 câu) và dùng từ nối khi mở rộng.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I'm more familiar with the places and culture. I also enjoy local food and traditions there, which makes sightseeing more meaningful and comfortable for me.

× Yes, I really like taking pictures after using these for every food and I also really like to sharing photos with my families and relatives to them so they could enjoy with me with the spectacular scenery of the picture.

✓ Yes, I really like taking pictures of every dish, and I also really like sharing photos with my family and relatives so they can enjoy the spectacular scenery in the pictures with me.

The sentence misuses verb forms and articles and has redundant words. Use 'taking pictures of' not 'after using these for every food'. After 'like' use the gerund 'sharing', not 'to sharing'. Use 'family' as an uncountable collective noun rather than 'families', and 'relatives' without 'to them'. Use 'so they can' for ability/purpose. Remove redundant prepositions 'with' repeated. Suggestions: 1) Use gerunds after verbs of preference (like + -ing). 2) Use 'of' to express what is being photographed. 3) Keep noun forms simple: 'family and relatives'. 4) Use concise phrasing to avoid redundancy.

× To me, I prefer these of your areas more than urban areas because I like the peaceful uttermost here and clean air more than urban areas where people pass together or with crowded and much more vehicles than in the rural area.

✓ To me, I prefer rural areas to urban areas because I like the peacefulness and clean air in the countryside, while urban areas are crowded with many people and vehicles.

Incorrect and awkward prepositions and word choices: 'these of your areas' is incorrect; use 'rural areas'. 'Prefer X to Y' is the correct preposition for comparisons. 'Peaceful uttermost' is wrong; use 'peacefulness'. 'Pass together' and 'with crowded' are ungrammatical; use 'crowded with many people and vehicles'. 'In the rural area' should be plural or 'in the countryside'. Suggestions: 1) Use 'prefer X to Y' for comparisons. 2) Use correct noun forms (peacefulness, countryside). 3) Use 'crowded with' to describe what fills a place.

× To me, I people who use in my own country than in other countries, because in other countries bills maybe not in my not in my favorite and in my own country I think that I can taste the beast that more than in other countries.

✓ For me, I prefer places in my own country to those in other countries, because in other countries the bills or prices may not be my favorite, and in my own country I think I can taste the food I like more than in other countries.

This sentence has multiple pronoun and word-choice errors making it unclear. 'I people who use' is ungrammatical; you need a subject and verb: 'I prefer places'. Use 'those' to refer to plural 'places' in the second clause. 'Bills maybe not in my not in my favorite' is unintelligible; likely intended meaning is 'prices may not be favorable' so use 'bills or prices may not be to my liking'. 'Taste the beast' is incorrect—probably 'taste the best' or 'taste the food I like'; corrected to 'taste the food I like'. Suggestions: 1) Use clear pronouns ('those') to refer back to nouns. 2) Keep clauses parallel when comparing. 3) Replace incorrect words with intended vocabulary (prices, food).