Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, like), and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep answers under 4–5 sentences.

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos of different scenes, especially landscapes and candid street scenes, because they help me remember places. For example, last month I photographed a colorful market that captured the local culture, and I still look back at those pictures to relive the experience.

제안: Answer directly with a brief topic sentence, reduce hesitation and repetition, and add one specific reason and an example using a linking word (e.g., because, for example).

예시: I prefer rural views because I find the countryside more peaceful and visually interesting. For example, when I visited my grandmother's village last summer, I took photos of rice fields and old houses that showed traditional life, which made my photos more meaningful.

제안: Be clearer and more accurate: state a balanced opinion in one sentence, then give two specific and correctly named examples with brief reasons. Avoid vague or incorrect place names and reduce filler words.

예시: I enjoy views in both my country and abroad because each offers different attractions: in India, monuments like the Taj Mahal are historically rich, while countries such as Canada offer vast natural scenery like the Rocky Mountains. For instance, I love photographing architectural details at the Taj Mahal, but I also enjoy wide landscape shots in mountain regions abroad.

× I love taking photographs of everything and whenever I'm free, I always click pictures of myself, uh, like the selfie photos and uh, whenever I go out, I make sure to click each and every picture.

✓ I love taking photographs of everything, and whenever I'm free I always take pictures of myself, like selfies, and whenever I go out I make sure to take pictures of everything.

The verbs 'click pictures' are informal and nonstandard in this context; use the verb 'take' with 'pictures' or 'selfies'. Also 'selfie photos' is redundant; use 'selfies'. Removed unnecessary commas and fillers for clarity. Suggestion: use 'take' + object for natural English and avoid filler words. Grammar problem type ID: 10

× I, uh, I, I get very enthusiastic when I go to countryside areas.

✓ I get very enthusiastic when I go to the countryside.

The original mixes present tense with awkward noun phrase 'countryside areas'. Use 'go to the countryside' (noun phrase) for natural expression. Also remove repeated hesitations. Suggestion: keep present simple 'get' to state habitual feelings and use 'the countryside.' Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Uh, like I remember when I used to go to my grandmother's village, I, I used to click really interesting pictures there.

✓ I remember when I used to go to my grandmother's village, I used to take really interesting pictures there.

Replace nonstandard 'click pictures' with 'take pictures'. 'Used to' correctly indicates past habit; keep present 'I remember' and past habitual 'used to.' Remove repetitions and fillers. Suggestion: use 'take' for natural collocation with 'pictures.' Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Well, I would say that I, uh, love the views of both of the places because in my nation there are a lot of places that, uh, captures my attention and, uh, I'm really fascinated, uh, to the places like Taj Mahal in Agra, Agra, Redford in Delhi.

✓ Well, I would say that I love the views of both places because in my country there are a lot of places that capture my attention, and I'm really fascinated by places like the Taj Mahal in Agra and Red Fort in Delhi.

Subject-verb agreement: 'places that captures' is incorrect; use 'places that capture' because 'places' is plural. Use 'in my country' instead of 'in my nation' for natural English. 'Fascinated to the places' is incorrect preposition; use 'fascinated by places.' Correct place name 'Red Fort' and remove repeated 'Agra.' Suggestion: ensure plural subjects take plural verbs and use correct prepositions ('fascinated by'). Grammar problem type ID: 27

× On the other hand, uh, uh, in countries like Canada also there are, uh, places like Sianta.

✓ On the other hand, in countries like Canada there are also places I like, such as Santa (or another place name).

Awkward word order 'countries like Canada also there are' should be 'in countries like Canada there are also'. The place name 'Sianta' seems incorrect; replace with the correct name (for example 'Santa') or clarify. Remove fillers. Suggestion: use natural word order and verify proper nouns. Grammar problem type ID: 26