Typing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: give a direct topic sentence, then one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid fillers (uh) and odd phrases like "in other hand" or "your handwriting." Use varied vocabulary (e.g., "efficient," "more legible").

예시: I prefer typing to handwriting because it’s much faster and more efficient. For example, I can edit my work quickly and store documents digitally, which saves time and keeps everything organized.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence (desktop or laptop), then add one specific reason and an example. Remove hesitations and repetition. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

예시: I usually type on my laptop every day because I teach at a high school and prepare lessons and student feedback on the go. For instance, I often edit slides and mark assignments between classes.

제안: Provide a clear time reference and concise supporting detail. Avoid vague phrases like "like every kid" and misplaced adjectives ("blissful" sounds odd). Use linking words (e.g., "when," "because") and be specific about age or year.

예시: I learned to type in the early 2000s when I was a child. My older brother wrote songs and I often typed his lyrics for him, so I practiced a lot and became comfortable with the keyboard.

제안: Clarify your method with a clear topic sentence, specific strategies, and correct vocabulary. Avoid unclear metaphors ("good diaper") and grammatical errors. Mention concrete practices (daily practice, online exercises, typing software) and link them logically.

예시: I improve my typing by practicing every day and using online typing exercises to increase speed and accuracy. For example, I spend 15 minutes on a typing website and focus on accuracy first, then gradually increase my speed.

× I prefer typing because I find that very beneficial and it's much easier than handwriting. And uh, in other hand, it's much faster and it's much more convenient to use a keyboard instead of your handwriting.

✓ I prefer typing because I find it very beneficial and much easier than handwriting. On the other hand, it's much faster and more convenient to use a keyboard than to write by hand.

The phrase 'in other hand' is incorrect; the correct idiom is 'on the other hand' (preposition error). 'I find that very beneficial' is awkward; use 'I find it very beneficial' where 'it' refers to typing. 'Instead of your handwriting' is a wrong preposition/phrase; use 'than to write by hand' for comparison. Also remove redundant 'it's' and 'much' repetition for clarity. Suggestions: use the fixed idiom 'on the other hand', use 'it' as a dummy pronoun for 'find it', and compare with 'than to write by hand'.

× Usually I'm typing on my laptop on daily basis because I'm working as an uh. As a professor in high school and uh, it is. I'm doing that on a daily basis.

✓ Usually I type on my laptop on a daily basis because I work as a high school professor, so I do that every day.

Use simple present 'I type' and 'I work' for habitual actions rather than present continuous 'I'm typing'/'I'm working' (present participle misuse). 'On daily basis' requires the article 'a' ('on a daily basis'). Remove filler fragments ('it is. I'm doing that') and combine into a clear sentence. Suggestions: use simple present for routines and include 'a' in 'a daily basis'.

× Like every kid back in 2000s, I learned from my older brother who was an songwriter, so I had to help him on daily basis to write some songs.

✓ Like every kid back in the 2000s, I learned from my older brother who was a songwriter, so I had to help him on a daily basis to write songs.

'2000s' needs the definite article 'the' when referring to the decade ('the 2000s'). 'An songwriter' is wrong because 'songwriter' begins with a consonant sound; use 'a songwriter' (article error). 'On daily basis' needs the article 'a' ('on a daily basis'). Also 'some songs' can be simplified to 'songs'. Suggestions: use correct articles ('the 2000s', 'a songwriter', 'a daily basis').

× So I would type the whole day and that made my experience even more blissful.

✓ So I would type all day, and that made the experience even more enjoyable.

Mixing 'would' with past result is acceptable for habitual past, but 'the whole day' is better as 'all day'. 'Blissful' is uncommon for this context; 'enjoyable' is more natural. No major tense error but wording and collocation improved. Suggestions: use 'all day' and choose collocations that sound natural ('made the experience more enjoyable').

× Exercising is the crucial making mistakes as well, but I would choose typing on daily basis. Just help you improve your skills as a good diaper.

✓ Practicing is crucial, and making mistakes is part of learning, but I would choose typing every day. It will help you improve your skills.

The original sentence has multiple structural issues: 'Exercising is the crucial making mistakes as well' is ungrammatical and unclear (sentence structure error). 'On daily basis' needs 'a' and should be 'every day' for clarity. The fragment 'Just help you improve...' lacks a subject and verb agreement; change to 'It will help you improve your skills.' 'As a good diaper' is meaningless and likely a wrong word. Suggestions: separate ideas into clear clauses, use 'practicing' or 'exercising' appropriately, include subjects for sentences, and remove incorrect words like 'diaper'.