Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문법과 어휘 선택을 정확하게 다듬고, 응답 구조를 더 명확히 하세요. 먼저 주제문으로 간단히 답한 뒤 이유를 1-2개로 구체적으로 설명하고, 연결어(to, so, therefore 등)를 자연스럽게 사용하세요. 예를 들어 ‘motion sickness’와 같은 정확한 표현을 사용하고 시제·조동사(use of can/ could)를 일관되게 하며 불필요한 반복(예: motion situation, motion situous)을 피하세요. 문장은 3문장 이내로 유지하고 핵심 정보를 구체적으로 제시하세요.

예시: Yes, I usually prefer to sit by the window when I travel. I suffer from motion sickness, so looking outside helps me focus on the horizon and reduces my nausea. Also, I can lean against the window and often fall asleep, which makes long trips more comfortable.

제안: 문장을 명확한 시간 흐름과 문법으로 정리하세요. 주제문으로 과거 경험을 직접 답한 뒤, 언제(when), 누구와(with whom), 어떻게(how) 등 구체적 세부사항을 한두 개 추가하세요. 과거 시제를 일관되게 사용하고, 부자연스러운 표현(예: ‘because of my education I should come back’)을 자연스러운 영어로 바꾸세요. 또한 숫자 표현은 ‘when I was five’처럼 정확히 표현하세요.

예시: Yes, I did. I was born in Russia, and when I was five my family travelled back to China by train. I remember sitting on the train with my parents and eating snacks while looking out of the window.

× Yes, absolutely because I have motion situous.

✓ Yes, absolutely because I have motion sickness.

The student used the incorrect adjective 'situous' which is not a word; the correct noun is 'motion sickness'. Use the fixed phrase 'have motion sickness' to describe feeling ill during travel. Suggestion: learn common collocations for medical conditions (e.g., 'motion sickness', 'seasickness').

× So if I had a chance to sit by the window I can watch outside and it can really ease my motion situation and also I can lean on the window and fall asleep too.

✓ So if I have a chance to sit by the window, I can watch outside, which really eases my motion sickness, and I can lean on the window and fall asleep too.

Several issues: tense consistency and verb forms. The condition 'if I had a chance' (past unreal) conflicts with 'I can' (present ability). Use present real conditional 'if I have a chance' with 'can'. 'Ease my motion situation' is unnatural; use 'ease my motion sickness'. Also change 'it can really ease' to 'which really eases' for sentence flow. Suggestion: keep conditional tense consistent and use correct nouns and clauses for clarity.

× Yes, actually I was born in Russia because of my education I should come back to China so I remembered at my five years old I sit at the train and had a snack.

✓ Yes, I was born in Russia, but because of my education I had to come back to China. I remember that when I was five years old I was sitting on the train and had a snack.

Multiple tense and modal errors: 'because of my education I should come back' is incorrect; use past obligation 'I had to come back'. 'I remembered at my five years old' is ungrammatical; use 'I remember that when I was five years old'. The verbs describing the past scene should be in past continuous or simple past: 'I was sitting' or 'I sat'. Suggestion: use 'had to' for past necessity, 'when I was five years old' for age, and use past continuous for actions in progress.