Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and clarity. Begin with a clear topic sentence, use correct tenses, and avoid repetition. Add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. For example, explain when you look out (e.g. short trips, night, good weather) and why (e.g. enjoy landscapes, remember places). Keep answers to no more than 4–5 sentences.

예시: Usually I sleep on buses because I get motion sickness, so I take medicine before travelling. However, if the journey is short or the weather is nice, I look out the window to enjoy the scenery and remember places I have visited. For example, I often watch rivers and old buildings when I travel alone.

제안: Make a clear, direct response and use coherent linking. Correct sentence structure and be specific about situations when you take photos (e.g. morning light, famous landmarks). Avoid confusing phrasing like "the whole scenery of you outside". Keep to 3–4 sentences maximum.

예시: Yes, I sometimes take photos from the car, especially when I sit in the front seat and the view is wide. I enjoy capturing sunrise or interesting buildings, and I often share good shots with friends on social media. Taking photos helps me remember the trip and feel refreshed.

제안: State a clear preference first, then give reasons using linking words (because, although, however). Use specific details (activities, food, scenery). Fix grammar (e.g. "they are" unclear) and avoid trailing sentences. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer the sea because I like swimming and eating fresh seafood, especially grilled fish at coastal markets. However, I also enjoy the mountains for hiking and quiet views when I want to relax. Usually I choose the sea for a fun weekend and the mountains for peaceful holidays.

× When I take the bus, I always took the classic medicine, so when I get on the bus I feel asleep.

✓ When I take the bus, I always take motion-sickness medicine, so when I get on the bus I fall asleep.

The student mixed past tense 'took' with present habitual context 'When I take the bus'. Use present tense 'take'. Also 'feel asleep' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'fall asleep'. Use 'fall asleep' for the action of going to sleep. Suggestion: keep tense consistent for habits and use correct verb collocations (take medicine, fall asleep).

× So I always sleep on the bus.

✓ So I always sleep on the bus.

This sentence is grammatically correct for a habitual action using the present simple. No change needed. Explanation: present simple is appropriate to describe habitual actions; keep subject-verb as 'I sleep'. Note: included only because you asked each sentence individually.

× But sometimes I look look out the window at the scenery to relay the street or I can remember when I travel alone.

✓ But sometimes I look out of the window at the scenery to enjoy the street, or I can remember things when I travel alone.

Repeated word 'look look' is a typo. Use 'look out of the window' (phrasal verb). 'to relay the street' is incorrect word choice; likely 'enjoy the street' or 'recall the street'. Also 'I can remember when I travel alone' needs an object: 'remember things' or 'remember places'. Present simple 'travel' is fine for habitual actions. Suggestion: use correct phrasal verbs and choose accurate verbs for meaning.

× Yes, I know if I could sit next to the driver so I can take the whole scenery of you outside for taking the view outside and also help me feel fresh and I can share it on social media or to my friend and I can get back to.

✓ Yes, I know if I can sit next to the driver I can take a wide photo of the view outside; it also helps me feel refreshed and I can share it on social media or send it to my friends to look back at later.

Modal verbs were mixed incorrectly: 'could' vs 'can' and conditional structure was unclear. Use 'if I can... I can...' for a real possibility. 'Take the whole scenery of you outside' is ungrammatical; use 'take a wide photo of the view outside'. 'Help me feel fresh' better as 'help me feel refreshed'. 'Share it on social media or to my friend' should be 'share it on social media or send it to my friends'. Also 'get back to' is unclear; use 'look back at later'. Suggestion: keep conditional/modal forms consistent and use clear verbs for actions (take a photo, send, share).

× Yes, I know if I could sit next to the driver so I can take the whole scenery of you outside for taking the view outside and also help me feel fresh and I can share it on social media or to my friend and I can get back to.

✓ Yes, I know if I can sit next to the driver I can take a wide photo of the view outside; it also helps me feel refreshed and I can share it on social media or send it to my friends to look back at later.

Pronouns and references are confusing: 'of you outside' incorrectly refers to 'you'; likely meant 'outside'. 'to my friend' should be plural 'to my friends' or 'to a friend'. Fixing pronouns clarifies meaning. Suggestion: refer clearly to the thing being shared (it/the photo) and use consistent pluralization for recipients.

× I prefer most sometime I always go to the sea if I would like to swim or want to eat the seafood because it's really fresh and they are.

✓ I prefer the sea most of the time. I always go to the sea when I want to swim or eat seafood because it is really fresh.

Original sentence is run-on and mixes tenses and adverbs incorrectly. 'I prefer most sometime' is ungrammatical; use 'I prefer the sea most of the time'. 'If I would like to swim or want to eat' should be 'when I want to swim or eat'. 'Seafood' is an uncountable noun; 'they are' is incorrect; use 'it is'. Suggestion: break into short sentences, use 'when' for habitual reasons, and match noun number with pronouns.

× And sometimes I also enjoy the MO mountain because of the view and.

✓ And sometimes I also enjoy the mountains because of the view.

'MO mountain' seems to be a typo; use 'the mountains' or a specific mountain name. Remove trailing 'and' which leaves the sentence incomplete. Use plural 'mountains' if speaking generally. Suggestion: provide specific noun or use correct plural; avoid sentence fragments.