Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Keep the answer more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid redundant phrases like “I have to” and repeated structure. Also correct minor phrasing: say “while travelling” rather than “during travelling.”

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window while travelling by bus or car. For example, I enjoy watching changing landscapes, especially old houses and fields, because they help me relax during long journeys.

제안: Provide a clearer, slightly more varied explanation. Start with a direct statement, then give a specific reason and limit exaggeration (e.g., “lots” is vague). Mention how you choose subjects and any purpose for the photos to enrich the answer.

예시: Yes, I often take photos from the car window. For instance, I sometimes photograph particular trees or striking views because I like to collect memories of places we pass and review the pictures later.

제안: Organise the answer into a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Correct grammar and remove confusing fragments (e.g., “my grandparents but recently interned” is unclear). If you like both, explain briefly why with a comparison using linking words like “because” or “however.”

예시: I can't choose between the mountains and the sea because I like different things about each. For example, I love the sea for its relaxing beaches and fresh air, but I also enjoy the mountains for hiking and the peaceful views, so I appreciate both depending on my mood.

× Of course I have to look at the scenery outside the window when I'm travelling by bus or car.

✓ Of course I look at the scenery outside the window when I'm travelling by bus or car.

The original uses 'have to look' which implies obligation rather than habitual action. The question asks about usual behavior while travelling, so the simple present 'I look' correctly expresses habit. Suggestion: use simple present for regular habits.

× In fact, other than sleeping during travelling, that is all I'm doing.

✓ In fact, other than sleeping while travelling, that's all I do.

Problems: 'during travelling' is unidiomatic (preposition + gerund), 'that is all I'm doing' uses present continuous incorrectly for habitual action. Use 'while' + gerund and simple present 'I do' to express routine. Also contract 'that's' is acceptable.

× Oh yes, even before we reach the destination, I take lots of photos of the same tree.

✓ Oh yes, even before we reach our destination, I take lots of photos of the same tree.

Add 'our' to specify whose destination; otherwise sentence is grammatical. Tense 'reach' and 'take' are correct as habitual actions in present, so keep simple present. Suggestion: include appropriate possessive and keep simple present for habits.

× I've been trying to answer this question since very long.

✓ I've been trying to answer this question for a very long time.

Use 'for' with durations (for a long time) and include 'time' for clarity. 'Since' requires a specific starting point. The present perfect continuous is fine here; change preposition and word order for idiomatic expression.

× Since I belong to a coastal region, my grandparents but recently interned in beautiful Himalayas.

✓ I belong to a coastal region, and my grandparents recently moved to the beautiful Himalayas.

Original is ungrammatical: 'but recently interned' is incorrect verb and placement; 'interned' means confined in a camp. Likely intended 'moved' or 'settled'. Also 'since' at sentence start creates a causal clause that doesn't connect cleanly. Use simple coordination 'and' and correct verb 'moved' with article 'the' before 'beautiful Himalayas.' Suggestion: choose the correct verb for relocation and place clauses clearly.

× So a very difficult choice with this.

✓ So this is a very difficult choice.

Original lacks a proper verb and has incorrect word order. Use subject 'this' + verb 'is' + complement to form a complete sentence. Suggestion: use full clause structure instead of fragments.

× I think both.

✓ I think both are appealing.

'I think both' is a fragment; add a complement to indicate what 'both' refers to (both the mountains and the sea). Use simple present 'think' for opinion and add adjective 'appealing' or phrase 'equally attractive.' Suggestion: complete the thought by specifying why or how both are chosen.