Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct minor grammar (e.g., "traveling by bus or car" without extra articles, and "nature" as uncountable). Limit to about 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy seeing the surrounding scenery. For example, watching trees and fields passing by relaxes me and helps me unwind after a busy day.

제안: Complete the sentence and avoid repetition. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give a specific reason and a brief example. Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly, and fix grammar (e.g., "watch the changing landscape"). Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: No, I don't usually take photos because I prefer to watch the changing landscape as I travel. For instance, I like to notice how the countryside turns into suburbs, which I find more rewarding than taking pictures.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then provide two specific, well-linked reasons. Avoid awkward phrases (e.g., "it comes my mind") and use more natural expressions like "it helps me relax". Keep responses concise and grammatically correct.

예시: I prefer the sea because walking along the shoreline and listening to the waves helps me relax. The sound of the water calms my mind and refreshes me after a long day.

× Yes, I often look out the window when traveling by a bus or car because I want to see the beautiful scenery.

✓ Yes, I often look out the window when traveling by a bus or car because I want to see beautiful scenery.

The phrase 'the beautiful scenery' is acceptable, but 'the' before 'beautiful scenery' is not necessary when speaking generally. Removing 'the' sounds more natural. Also 'a bus or car' can remain, but 'traveling by bus or car' is more natural; however, this correction focuses on the article before 'beautiful scenery'. Use no article for uncountable nouns when speaking generally.

× I want to see the nature.

✓ I want to see nature.

'Nature' is an uncountable noun when referring to the natural world, so it should not take the definite article 'the' in this general statement. Use 'see nature' or 'see the natural scenery' if you mean specific aspects.

× It relaxes me watching.

✓ Watching relaxes me.

The original word order is awkward. In English, the subject should come before the verb: 'Watching relaxes me.' Alternatively, 'It relaxes me to watch' is correct. Reorder words to form a clear subject-verb-object structure.

× I don't usually take pictures of the scenery outside the car window because I prefer to watch it as I travel.

✓ I don't usually take pictures of the scenery outside the car window because I prefer to watch it as I travel.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the tense and context, so no correction is necessary. Explanation: the clause structure and verb forms are appropriate.

× I want to enjoy the scenery and watching changing a landscape from one place to another, so I.

✓ I want to enjoy the scenery and watch the landscape change as I move from one place to another, so I don't take pictures.

After 'enjoy' use the base verb with -ing (enjoy watching) or use parallel structure 'enjoy the scenery and watch...'. The original mixes forms incorrectly ('enjoy... and watching changing a landscape'). Also 'changing a landscape' is incorrect; the correct structure is 'watch the landscape change' or 'watch changing landscapes'. The sentence was incomplete; I completed it to match context by adding 'so I don't take pictures.'

× I prefer to watch the sea because I like to walk in the shoreline and hear the sounds of the big waves because it comes my mind and gives me time to relax and refresh after a long day.

✓ I prefer to watch the sea because I like to walk along the shoreline and hear the sound of the big waves; it clears my mind and gives me time to relax and refresh after a long day.

Preposition: use 'along the shoreline' or 'on the shoreline', not 'in the shoreline'. 'Sounds' can be 'sound' for the general idea; both are possible but 'the sound of the waves' is more natural. 'It comes my mind' is incorrect; idiomatic expression is 'it clears my mind' or 'it comes to mind' (different meaning). Also the sentence was long and needed restructuring: replaced the second 'because' with a semicolon and corrected verb forms for clarity.