Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Begin with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific reasons or an example. Avoid vague phrasing like "so happy" without explanation and keep to no more than five sentences. Use a linking word to connect your reason.

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the changing landscape. For example, I like spotting unusual buildings or rural fields, which helps me relax during a long trip.

제안: Start with a direct answer, then give a clear, specific reason and an example. Avoid past-tense mismatches and repetition ("also" twice). Use a linking word (e.g., "because" or "so") and keep sentences concise.

예시: Yes, I often take photos through the car window because sunsets and city views look beautiful from that angle. For instance, last month I photographed a vibrant sunset over the river and later used the pictures as a background on my phone.

제안: Give a direct answer, then provide two clear and specific reasons connected with linking words. Avoid irrelevant details (favorite color alone) and incomplete sentences. Mention a brief example or activity to support your preference.

예시: I prefer the sea because I love swimming and relaxing on the beach. For example, I usually go to the coast on weekends to swim and watch the waves, which makes me feel refreshed.

× Yes, of course, because it makes me feel so happy.

✓ Yes, of course, because it makes me feel very happy.

The original sentence is grammatically correct in tense but 'so happy' is informal and vague in this context. Replacing 'so' with 'very' is more appropriate for a clear spoken response. Maintain present tense as the question asks about a habitual action. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Well yes, I like to take photos outside the car window because the sunset was nice and pretty and also I liked photos of myself also.

✓ Well yes, I like to take photos outside the car window because the sunset is beautiful, and I also like photos of myself.

The sentence mixes present tense (I like) with past tense (was nice, I liked). Keep tense consistent: use present tense to describe general preferences. Replace 'nice and pretty' with 'beautiful' for conciseness and correct repetition of 'also'. Remove extra 'also'. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Well, I prefer sea because my favorite color is blue and also I want to swim as always and I often.

✓ Well, I prefer the sea because my favorite color is blue, and I often want to swim.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'sea' when speaking generally about preference for the sea. The original also contains awkward and redundant phrases: 'as always and I often' is ungrammatical. Reorder to 'I often want to swim' to express habitual desire and keep present tense consistent. Grammar problem type ID: 17