Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition and filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., "I always prefer" not "I always used to prefer and prefer").

예시: I usually choose a window seat when I travel. For example, I like to watch changing landscapes and take photos, especially during sunrise or when we pass through mountains, because the view makes the journey more enjoyable.

제안: Use natural phrasing and correct verb forms, and avoid repeating the same idea. Provide a brief specific example of what you photograph and why to add interest. Use a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I often take photos and videos from the window. For instance, I like to photograph mountain ranges and sunsets because the light at dusk creates striking colours, so I usually keep my camera ready.

제안: State your preference clearly in one sentence, then give specific reasons with linking words. Avoid vague phrases and fillers, and correct small phrasing issues (e.g., "I prefer the mountains because they" not "on mountains they give me").

예시: I prefer the mountains because they are peaceful and quieter than coastal areas. For example, I enjoy hiking in pine forests and watching sunset views from ridges, which helps me relax and disconnect from city noise.

× I always take window seat whenever I travel somewhere uh even in the car in the bus in train or in air or in aeroplane.

✓ I always take a window seat whenever I travel, whether by car, bus, train, or plane.

Missing and incorrect articles and prepositions: 'window seat' needs the indefinite article 'a'; 'in the car in the bus in train or in air or in aeroplane' is ungrammatical and uses wrong prepositions and repetition. Use 'whether by' to list modes of transport and the correct nouns 'car, bus, train, plane'. Use commas to separate items. Grammar problem type ID:22

× I always used to prefer and prefer window seats because I want to watch scenery outside the window.

✓ I have always preferred window seats because I want to watch the scenery outside the window.

Incorrect combination of 'used to' with 'and prefer' and awkward tense. 'Used to' suggests a past habit; the speaker means a continuing preference, so 'have always preferred' is correct. Also 'scenery' needs the definite article 'the' when referring to the view outside the window. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I want to photograph those sceneries uh so yes definitely I.

✓ I want to photograph those scenes, so yes, definitely I do.

'Sceneries' is nonstandard plural; use 'scenes' or 'the scenery'. The original ends with an incomplete fragment 'I.' which lacks a main verb. Add 'do' to complete the sentence and use commas for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I am a photographic person.

✓ I am a photography enthusiast.

'Photographic person' is unnatural English. Use a noun phrase like 'photography enthusiast' or 'an avid photographer' to express the idea clearly and idiomatically. Grammar problem type ID:13

× I always photographs beautiful sceneries while sitting in the window seat.

✓ I always photograph beautiful scenes while sitting in the window seat.

Subject-verb agreement error: with subject 'I' the verb should be 'photograph' (not 'photographs'). 'Sceneries' is nonstandard; use 'scenes' or 'the scenery'. Grammar problem type ID:27

× I always record and make videos in those beautiful sceneries like mountains, sunsets, landscapes.

✓ I always record and make videos of those beautiful scenes, such as mountains, sunsets, and landscapes.

Use 'of' rather than 'in' when recording videos of scenery. 'Sceneries' is nonstandard; 'scenes' or 'scenery' is better. Use 'such as' to introduce examples and include commas between items. Grammar problem type ID:22

× I always prefer mountains overseas because I am not uh, much fond of sea or water.

✓ I always prefer mountains abroad because I am not very fond of the sea or of water.

Use 'abroad' rather than 'overseas' if speaking generally; both can work but 'abroad' is more natural here. 'Much fond of' is incorrect; use 'very fond of'. 'Sea' referring to the concept needs the definite article 'the sea'. Add 'of' before 'water' for parallel structure. Grammar problem type ID:22

× I always like to go to mountains because on mountains they give me peace and relaxed environment where I can sit and watch, uh, sunsets, landscapes, etcetera.

✓ I always like going to the mountains because they give me a peaceful and relaxed environment where I can sit and watch sunsets and landscapes.

Use 'going to the mountains' or 'go to the mountains' with definite article 'the'. 'On mountains' is incorrect here. 'They give me peace and relaxed environment' is ungrammatical; use 'a peaceful and relaxed environment'. Remove 'etcetera' for clarity and use 'and' between items. Use '-ing' after 'like' for habitual actions ('like going'). Grammar problem type ID:11