Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, reduce filler words (uh, definitely), and add one specific detail to support your answer. Keep to 2–4 sentences and use linking words for coherence.

예시: I usually sit by the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the scenery. For example, I often photograph sunsets and green bays along the route, which helps me remember trips. Therefore, I prefer the window seat whenever possible.

제안: Avoid repetition and fillers; correct grammar (e.g., 'into taking', 'scenic views'), and finish your thought with a specific example or brief detail. Use one linking phrase to connect sentences (for example, 'for example' or 'last week').

예시: Yes, I often take photos from the car window because I enjoy capturing green landscapes and interesting views. For example, last week I photographed a series of rice terraces while driving through the countryside, and I later shared the best shots with my friends.

제안: Give a clear direct answer then support with two specific reasons. Remove hesitations and correct grammar (e.g., 'fresh air', 'activities such as paragliding and hiking'). Keep sentences concise and finish your thought fully.

예시: I prefer the mountains because they offer more outdoor activities, such as paragliding and hiking. In addition, mountain scenery is peaceful and the air feels fresher, which helps me relax and recharge.

× Definitely I love to sit on a window side whenever I travel by bus or car, uh, because I love the sceneries and the views outside the window.

✓ Definitely I love to sit by the window whenever I travel by bus or car because I love the scenery and the views outside the window.

'Window side' is not the correct phrase; use 'by the window' or 'in the window seat'. 'Sceneries' is incorrect because 'scenery' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized. Also remove filler words for clarity. Suggestion: use collocations like 'sit by the window' and treat 'scenery' as uncountable.

× And definitely I sometimes click the pictures because there are lots of views like sunset view and Green Bay views are there.

✓ I sometimes take pictures because there are many views, like sunsets and views of the Green Bay.

'Click the pictures' is nonstandard; use 'take pictures'. 'Lots of' is acceptable but 'many' fits better before a count noun. 'Sunset view' should be pluralized to 'sunsets' or rephrased as 'sunset views'. 'Green Bay views are there' is awkward; use 'views of the Green Bay.' Suggestion: use 'take pictures', pluralize appropriately, and reorder for natural English.

× So I love to sit and I love to look out the window.

✓ So I love sitting and looking out of the window.

This is stylistic: using gerunds 'sitting' and 'looking' produces a smoother, more natural sentence in this context. 'Look out the window' should be 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window' is acceptable in some dialects; prefer 'look out of the window' for clarity. Suggestion: use parallel gerund forms for repeated actions.

× Definitely, I'm really into to take the pictures outside the car or car window because there I love the greenery and there are lots of scenic views outside the window.

✓ Definitely, I'm really into taking pictures from the car window because I love the greenery and the many scenic views outside.

'Into to take' is incorrect; after 'into' use a gerund: 'into taking'. 'Outside the car or car window' is redundant; 'from the car window' is clearer. 'There I love the greenery' is awkward—remove 'there.' Suggestion: use 'into' + gerund and simplify redundant phrases.

× So I love to take the pictures of that scenic views.

✓ So I love to take pictures of those scenic views.

'The pictures of that scenic views' has number mismatch: 'that' + plural 'views' is incorrect; use 'those' for plural. Also drop the article 'the' before 'pictures' unless specific pictures are meant. Suggestion: match demonstrative pronoun to noun number and omit unnecessary articles.

× And also, uh, last week I clicked lots of pictures that, uh, uh, was.

✓ Also, last week I took many pictures.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and incomplete ('that ... was' has no clear subject or clause). 'Clicked' is nonstandard for taking photos in this context; use 'took'. Remove filler 'uh' and incomplete clause. Suggestion: form a complete clause with clear verb and object.

× Well, I prefer the mountains because there are lots of activities we can do with the with in this areas because in the hilly areas, there are paragliding and jumpings are there.

✓ Well, I prefer the mountains because there are lots of activities we can do in these areas; in the hills there is paragliding and jumping.

'With the with in this areas' is ungrammatical and redundant. Use 'in these areas' (plural demonstrative 'these' for 'areas'). 'Paragliding and jumpings are there' has errors: 'paragliding' is an uncountable or activity noun and does not need 'are'; 'jumping' should be 'jumps' or better 'bungee jumping' or 'jumping activities' depending on meaning. Also subject-verb agreement: use 'there is paragliding' or 'there are activities such as paragliding and jumping.' Suggestion: simplify and correct demonstratives and verb agreement, and choose proper nouns for activities.

× So, uh, also the view of the mountains are very good as well as there are fresh airs and all the things.

✓ Also, the view of the mountains is very good, and there is fresh air and many other nice things.

Subject-verb agreement: 'the view' (singular) requires 'is' not 'are.' 'Fresh airs' is incorrect; 'air' is uncountable so use 'fresh air.' 'All the things' is vague and colloquial; 'many other nice things' is clearer. Suggestion: ensure singular subjects take singular verbs and use uncountable nouns correctly.

× So I want to.

✓ So I want to visit the mountains.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object or verb complement. 'I want to.' must be followed by an infinitive or clause. Provide the intended completion such as 'visit the mountains.' Suggestion: always complete 'want to' with an action.