Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and word order (e.g., 'I don't only look at my phone' → 'I don't only look at my phone'). Replace fragmented phrases with full sentences and use precise adjectives.

예시: Yes. I usually look out of the window instead of only using my phone because I enjoy seeing changing landscapes. For example, I like watching fields and small villages pass by, which I find peaceful and interesting.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and one specific reason with a linking word. Use natural collocations (take photos, keep memories) and correct tense and word order. Avoid vague phrases like 'come to be recoverable'—say 'so I can look back on them'.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window because they help me keep memories of special trips. For instance, I take pictures of unusual landscapes or interesting buildings so I can look back on them later.

제안: Start with a direct answer, then give one or two clear reasons using linking words (because, although). Use correct expressions for health issues (e.g., 'I get seasick' or 'I have been seasick since I was young'). Keep sentences short and coherent.

예시: I prefer the mountains because I often get seasick, so the sea makes me uncomfortable. Although I think the sea is beautiful, I usually choose mountain trips for hiking and quiet scenery.

× Yes, I don't only just looking on my phone when traveling.

✓ Yes, I'm not only just looking at my phone when traveling.

The original uses 'looking' without an auxiliary; progressive tense requires a form of 'be' (am/is/are). Also 'don't' with 'looking' is incorrect. Use 'I'm not only just looking' or better 'I don't only look' but to keep progressive use 'I'm not only looking'. Preposition 'on' is incorrect with 'phone'; use 'at'. Suggestion: use 'I'm not only looking at my phone when traveling' or 'I don't only look at my phone when traveling.'

× I like to look out the window to see the pictures.

✓ I like to look out of the window to see the scenery.

The phrase 'look out' is often followed by 'of' or 'the window' contextually 'look out of the window'. 'Pictures' is semantically odd; 'scenery' fits better. Use 'look out of the window to see the scenery.'

× Scenery is.

✓ The scenery is beautiful.

Original is an incomplete sentence lacking a verb and article. Add the noun phrase and adjective with the verb 'is' to form a complete sentence: 'The scenery is beautiful.'

× I think it's amaz, amazement and beautiful.

✓ I think it's amazing and beautiful.

'Amaz' and 'amazement' are incorrect forms here. The adjective 'amazing' correctly describes something as impressive. Combine adjectives with 'and': 'amazing and beautiful.'

× Yes, I will take photo as a record the scenery outside the car windows just because it is come to be recoverable and is unique memories for me.

✓ Yes, I will take photos to record the scenery outside the car window because it becomes a memorable and unique memory for me.

Multiple issues: 'take photo' should be plural 'take photos' or 'take a photo'. Use infinitive 'to record' not 'as a record'. 'the scenery outside the car windows' — use singular 'car window' or 'car windows' consistently and drop extra article; 'outside the car window' is acceptable. 'it is come to be recoverable' is ungrammatical; replace with 'because it becomes memorable' or 'because it is recoverable' is odd; better: 'becomes a memorable and unique memory' though slightly redundant; better: 'because it becomes a unique memory for me.' Suggestion: 'Yes, I will take photos to record the scenery outside the car window because it becomes a unique memory for me.'

× So I will take photo to record the life.

✓ So I will take photos to record my life.

'take photo' should be 'take photos' and 'record the life' is awkward; use 'record my life' to indicate personal experiences. Use plural 'photos' for general habit.

× It's because I afraid the sea since I have young disease, so I think mountain is suitable for me that to go for the sea.

✓ It's because I'm afraid of the sea since I had seasickness when I was young, so I think the mountains are more suitable for me than the sea.

Multiple pronoun and verb issues: 'I afraid' needs auxiliary 'I'm afraid of'. 'since I have young disease' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely means 'since I had seasickness when I was young' or 'since I got sick at sea when I was young.' 'so I think mountain is suitable for me that to go for the sea' is incorrect structure; use comparative phrasing 'mountains are more suitable for me than the sea.' Also use plural 'the mountains' and 'the sea' with definite article.

× Although I think the sea is beautiful, I just go to mountain to see the scenery.

✓ Although I think the sea is beautiful, I just go to the mountains to see the scenery.

Use the definite article with geographic features: 'the mountains' instead of 'mountain'. Also 'just go to' is acceptable but 'I usually go to the mountains' might be better. Keep 'the sea' as correct.