Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant with good detail (reason and coping strategies). To improve, make the response more concise, avoid redundancy (e.g., “motion sickness which causes me to feel very nauseous” repeats the idea), and use one or two linking words to structure it. Keep to 2–4 sentences maximum and include a brief example of what you do to pass time.

예시: No, I don’t — I often get motion sickness, so I usually keep myself occupied with my phone or read a book. Alternatively, my sister films the view on her phone so I can watch the scenery later, which helps me enjoy the trip without feeling unwell.

제안: This answer is natural and directly answers the question, but it is brief and a little repetitive (“helps me to come back to those experiences”). Improve by adding a specific example, using a linking word to expand, and varying vocabulary (e.g., “relive the moment,” “capture views”). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery through the window because they help me relive the trip later. For example, I photographed a mountain pass last month and looked back at those pictures when I was planning my next holiday.

제안: The answer communicates a preference but has several problems: grammatical mistakes, unclear phrasing (“prefer to see” should be “prefer the sea”), redundancy, and an unclear final phrase (“through some cayenne” appears incorrect). To improve, correct the grammar, state the preference directly, give two specific reasons with linking words, and avoid vague or incorrect words. Keep the answer to 2–3 sentences and include a concrete image or example.

예시: I prefer the sea because it feels mysterious — you can’t see how deep the water is, and that fascinates me. Also, I enjoy watching the waves and listening to the sound of the surf when I walk along the beach.

× I usually get motion sickness which causes me to feel very nauseous, so instead I keep myself occupied doing something else or have somebody else record the entire scenery for me so that I can watch them later.

✓ I usually get motion sickness, which causes me to feel very nauseous, so instead I keep myself occupied by doing something else or have somebody else record the entire scenery for me so that I can watch it later.

Error type 8: Missing preposition before a gerund and incorrect pronoun number. The phrase 'keep myself occupied doing something else' is acceptable conversationally, but more grammatically correct is 'keep myself occupied by doing something else' because the verb 'keep (someone) occupied' is often followed by 'by' before a gerund. Also 'the entire scenery' is a singular noun phrase, so the pronoun should be 'it', not 'them'. Suggest using 'by doing' and matching the pronoun to the singular noun; this keeps tense and meaning consistent.

× Sometimes I take pictures of the scenery outside because it helps me to come back to those experiences when I have my free time.

✓ Sometimes I take pictures of the scenery outside because they help me to recall those experiences when I have free time.

Error type 11: Pronoun reference and verb choice. 'It helps me to come back to those experiences' is awkward and uses a singular pronoun 'it' to refer to plural 'pictures'. Use 'they' to match 'pictures' and replace 'come back to those experiences' with 'recall those experiences' which is a more natural collocation in English. Also 'my free time' can be shortened to 'free time' for conciseness.

× Well, I'd say that I prefer to see because the sea offers has a lot of mystery to it.

✓ Well, I'd say that I prefer the sea because it offers a lot of mystery.

Error type 13: Redundant and incorrect phrase 'offers has'. The correct structure is either 'the sea offers a lot of mystery' or 'the sea has a lot of mystery'. Combining 'offers has' is ungrammatical. Also 'prefer to see' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is 'prefer the sea'. Simplify to 'I prefer the sea because it offers a lot of mystery.'

× Nobody knows the depth of the ocean.

✓ Nobody knows the depth of the ocean.

Error type 14: No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct. Kept for completeness; no change required.

× I generally enjoy looking at the waves and also sometimes through some cayenne.

✓ I generally enjoy looking at the waves and sometimes looking through sea spray.

Error type 11: Incorrect word choice and preposition. 'Through some cayenne' is incorrect and likely a wrong word choice (cayenne is a pepper). If the speaker meant 'sea spray' or 'spray', use that noun. Also clarify the parallel structure: 'enjoy looking at the waves and sometimes looking through sea spray.' This keeps the verbs parallel and the preposition usage natural.