Travelling— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and clear: start with a simple topic sentence that answers the question, then give 1–2 specific supporting details connected with clear linking words. Avoid unclear words and pronunciation errors (e.g., "offering", "cond"). Keep to 2–4 sentences and use precise vocabulary (e.g., "I often", "I usually", "I tend to").

예시: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I enjoy watching the changing landscape, especially trees and old buildings, because it helps me relax. However, if the trip is long I often fall asleep after a while, so I only watch for the first part of the journey.

제안: Answer directly and use natural phrasing; simplify and correct grammar (e.g., "when I'm still awake", "I take photos and videos of the scenery"). Add a brief specific reason or example and use a linking word to connect ideas. Keep sentences concise and natural.

예시: Yes, when I’m still awake I often take photos and short videos of the scenery outside the window. I do this to keep memories of each trip, especially when I see interesting landscapes or landmarks.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then explain with 1–2 specific reasons using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and unrelated metaphors. Use vocabulary appropriate to the topic (e.g., "mountains", "sea", "hiking", "views"). Keep it natural and coherent within 2–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer the mountains to the sea. I enjoy hiking and the fresh air on mountain trails, and the panoramic views from the top make the effort worthwhile. Also, I find mountain trips more relaxing because they are less crowded than beaches.

× How many travel by bus or car?

✓ How many people travel by bus or car?

The sentence uses 'How many' which requires a countable noun; 'people' is needed as the thing being counted. Without a noun, the question is incomplete. Use 'How many people' to ask about the number of travelers. Suggestion: include the noun that 'how many' refers to, e.g. 'How many people...'.

× I usually tend to look out the window.

✓ I usually tend to look out of the window.

The verb phrase 'look out' often takes the preposition 'of' when referring to a window in British English; however 'look out the window' is also commonly used in American English. This is a minor prepositional preference rather than a tense problem. To be idiomatic and clear, use 'look out of the window' or simply 'look out the window.' Suggestion: choose one consistent idiom, e.g. 'I usually look out the window.'

× I love to see the scenery while I'm offering.

✓ I love to see the scenery while I'm traveling.

The verb 'offering' is incorrect in this context. The intended meaning is to be in transit, so the correct verb is 'traveling' (or 'travelling'). Use 'traveling' as the present participle to describe an ongoing action. Suggestion: replace incorrect verb with 'traveling' so the clause reads 'while I'm traveling.'

× However, I have a cond.

✓ However, I have a condition.

'Cond.' is an inappropriate abbreviation in spoken or written answers; the full noun 'condition' should be used. This is not strictly an article error but a clarity/word choice issue. Use complete words for clarity. Suggestion: avoid abbreviations and write the full word 'condition.'

× I have a condition that I'm not having a moving vehicle.

✓ I have a condition that I can't be in a moving vehicle.

The phrase 'I'm not having a moving vehicle' is ungrammatical. 'Have' with a noun is not used to describe being inside a moving vehicle. Use modal 'can't' or 'cannot' plus 'be in' to express inability, and 'moving vehicle' is the object. The corrected sentence clearly expresses the condition. Suggestion: say 'I have a condition that means I can't be in a moving vehicle.'

× I usually fall asleep so it will just take a time looking at the scenery and doze off after.

✓ I usually fall asleep, so I only have a short time to look at the scenery before dozing off.

The original mixes tenses and uses awkward phrasing ('it will just take a time looking at the scenery'). The corrected version uses simple present tense for habitual action ('I usually fall asleep') and a clear time expression ('a short time') plus 'before dozing off' to show sequence. Suggestion: keep habitual actions in simple present and use clear time connectors like 'before.'

× Yes, whenever I still stay awake during my travel, I pull up my phone and take photos and videos in the scenery while I'm in a moving vehicle.

✓ Yes, whenever I stay awake during my travel, I take out my phone and take photos and videos of the scenery while I'm in a moving vehicle.

'Still stay awake' is redundant; 'stay awake' is sufficient. 'Pull up my phone' is informal and slightly awkward; 'take out my phone' or 'use my phone' is clearer. Use 'of the scenery' (correct preposition) rather than 'in the scenery.' Keep present tense for habitual actions. Suggestion: simplify redundant words and use correct prepositions: 'take photos and videos of the scenery.'

× I love to take my keep memories of each travel I have.

✓ I love to keep memories of each trip I take.

The original mixes nouns and verbs incorrectly ('take my keep memories'). Use 'keep memories' as the action and 'trip' instead of 'travel' as the noun for a single journey. Use 'I take' for the action of traveling. Suggestion: say 'I love to keep memories of each trip I take.'

× I prefer warranted what I love about being on a mountain top than the seas.

✓ I prefer mountains to the sea because I love being on a mountaintop.

The phrase 'warranted what I love about' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use the comparative structure 'prefer X to Y.' 'Mountains' and 'the sea' are the comparatives. 'Mountaintop' is one word or written as 'mountain top' but 'mountaintop' is common. Explain the reason after the main clause. Suggestion: use 'prefer X to Y' and then give a clear reason: 'I prefer mountains to the sea because...'.

× The challenge of time again.

✓ I enjoy the challenge of hiking again and the sense of achievement.

The original fragment 'The challenge of time again' is incomplete and unclear. It lacks a subject and verb. Clarify what 'challenge' refers to and make it a complete sentence. I inferred the intended meaning about physical challenge and reward but confirm with the student. Suggestion: make complete sentences that state subject and verb, e.g. 'I enjoy the challenge and the sense of accomplishment.'

× It's like a rebound after an exercise.

✓ It's like a rebound after exercise.

The phrase 'after an exercise' is grammatically possible but unusual; 'after exercise' is more natural when speaking about the general feeling following physical activity. Also 'rebound' is informal but acceptable. Ensure the sentence connects clearly to the previous idea. Suggestion: use 'after exercise' or rephrase to 'It feels like a rebound after exercise.'